either i am growing closer or slipping further away.
choosing is not an option,
least of all making myself known.
i can't break through the barrier.
please tell me someone will remember
so i can fade in peace.
ease me down and lie if you must.
About the Creator
Alivia Varvel
time is the most precious commodity
https://www.aliviavarvel.com/
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Keep reading
More stories from Alivia Varvel and writers in Poets and other communities.
Comments (10)
First and last sentences were so powerful - amazing poem!
Oo I really loved this! There's a deep desperation in this that you captured perfectly. Congrats on the Top Story!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
The last line is a stunner. ❣️
Oh that last line! Wonderful. Well done.
“ i can't break through the barrier” was a line that stuck out to me Alivia, and this reminded me of growing old and struggling with memory loss.
With writing like this...I'm sure you will be remembered by many people. Loved this take on the challenge a lot. Congrats on a fine fine fine Top Story!
Please accept my comments. It is lovely!
Gosh this was so poignant and emotional! Loved your Acrostic!
I’ll remember 💕 happy to see your name pop up again Alivia!