I want to think outside of the box.
I feel cramped,
Stale.
Too still.
Suffocated, some days.
One day, I felt shaken awake.
Finally, I felt the rush of freedom flowing, crinkling even.
Bathed in white bath water.
Lifted high, on a silver pedestal,
I finally felt validated.
But then, something almost attacked me,
and I jumped off the pedestal, into the safest corner I could find.
Suddenly, I missed the box.
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Rowan Finley
Father. Academic Advisor. Musician. Writer. My real name is Jesse Balogh.
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I love this, Rowan, so light-hearted and cute. Congratulations on making the leadership board this week!👏
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
I found this piece rather amusing! It also reminds me of a poetic cinnamon toast crunch commercial lol But I love it! :)
Komal nailed it 🔨 ⭐️ ⭐️⭐️⭐️ A butterfly has never tried to crawl back into the cocoon to go back to being a caterpillar... It waits for its wings to dry and flies up into a whole new world of freedom 🦋 The Great Adventure 💫
The words suffocated, shaken, and freedom stand out to me. Thanks for writing this and bringing some much needed contemplation
Ah, clever and relatable! That ending twist? Totally captures how comfort zones lure us back just when freedom starts to flutter.
The top picture clearly shows a cereal killer poised to snap, crackle and pop his victims...I'd jump too! 😆🤣😂