
There was a bang—
not thunder, not door-slam,
but a bone-deep cracking
like the sky’s own backbone snapping.
It echoed through the marrows of the hallway,
down wallpapered veins
of this house that never whispered,
only watched.
I stood barefoot on the linoleum—
cold-washed, breath hitched,
heart hiccupping like a broken siren
drowning under its own scream.
And the walls,
once papered in birds and strawberries,
peeled back like eyes
too tired to stay closed.
Images, I think,
spilled from the living room mirror.
I saw them crawl,
shadow-flickers wearing
Grandma’s church coat,
Mum’s angry perfume,
a hymn half-sung
and torn in half by silence.
The bang still lingers.
A bell without a tongue
ringing through teardrops
I’m too stubborn to let fall.
They gather behind my eyeballs
like secrets,
like Dad’s drawer of things I’m not supposed to know.
I walk down the hallway.
My feet make no sound—
numb toes,
a hush of movement
like I'm part of the dust now.
In the corner:
the crooked family photo,
smiling like liars caught in the act.
I call out.
No one answers.
Only the clock ticks—
an old, indifferent metronome
measuring out pain
in spoonfuls too big to swallow.
The front door is wide open.
Outside, everything is grey,
painted over in
unfeeling strokes.
Even the sun has forgotten
how to light.
They told me once
that teardrops are just
the soul’s way of sweating.
If that’s true,
I must be drowning
inside something I cannot see.
I crouch behind the couch.
That’s where the sound came from.
But all I find is absence—
a vacuum where comfort
used to hum low
like Mum’s voice
when she wasn’t afraid.
The bang took more
than sound.
It stole color,
shoved its hand
through the stained-glass of memory
and dragged out the joy.
Now the house sits—
a crypt with doilies,
and I am the girl who heard
the last melody
before it broke
into
a forever quiet.
About the Creator
Diane Foster
I’m a professional writer, proofreader, and all-round online entrepreneur, UK. I’m married to a rock star who had his long-awaited liver transplant in August 2025.
When not working, you’ll find me with a glass of wine, immersed in poetry.
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Comments (4)
Oh dear, so heartbreaking 💔 Wonderfully written and thanks for sharing this incredible piece~
Heartwrenching
The rhyme of the first few lines was smooth. The skies backbone snapping is a strong imagery, makes it feel like an experience that reaches outside the person. Wallpapered veins. I could picture it. I like how much thought went into these lines, they seemed as though they were carefully picked to give the effects I am now experiencing. I am inside a house that is alive 😳🙌🏽 The heart hiccuping, I like that. Okay, when I thought you won us over enough. You went on to describe the wallpaper peeling back like eyes, I could see this so vividly. It creeps me out but the words worked so well to drive this through my minds eye. ‘Images spilled from the living room mirror’… 😲, let me read that again. Very atmospheric. ‘Grandmas church coat’, oh that’s too close to home. The part where you said the feet made no sound, is bringing me chills. It’s eerie. This was absolutely amazing, I am blown away Diane. The bang stole colour, that is so deep. The last melody… 😭 this was so sad, but I can’t help but enjoy its beauty, the voice that sung through the cracks. Outstanding! 👌🏽👏🏽♥️
Wonderful words drenched in sadness