The Open Line
Don't leave me here

The phone rings
only once.
Like someone remembering
then deciding against it.
-
He lets it hang—
picks it up the second time.
And there she is.
Pressed against the signal
like lungs against a scream.
Sharp,
like ozone.
Like rust.
Like roses drowned in their own water.
-
She unfurls his name like a dare.
The voice isn’t hers anymore.
−·· --- − .----. − / .-.. . .- ...- . / -- . / .... . .-. .
Static.
“If you don’t love me—
don’t make it gentle.”
Click.
-
But the line won’t die.
It keeps on breathing through stitched lips.
His knuckles bleach.
The receiver sweats.
That sentence stays curled in his ear
like an ingrown nail.
-
And maybe she’s gone.
And maybe she never was.
-
The sky keeps bleeding.
The line runs hot.
That sentence she left
still pulses like meat.
Not every wound closes—
some just learn how to speak.
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About the Creator
Iris Obscura
Do I come across as crass?
Do you find me base?
Am I an intellectual?
Or an effed-up idiot savant spewing nonsense, like... *beep*
Is this even funny?
I suppose not. But, then again, why not?
Read on...
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Comments (5)
IRIS FOR THE WIN!! Congratulations!! Oh, the ingrown toenail rhyme was absolute genius.
Wow. This is so tense and uncomfortable. Love it, excellent word choice and atmosphere building. Fantastic poetry :)
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
"Don't leave me here." Such tension, nay, desperation on both ends of the line.
Lovely, Iris <3