The faded picture
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I found it - very hidden -
The faded edges of it now.
Our backs to the ancient stone wall.
You laughed at something I no longer know.
Sunshine tangled in your black hair.
God, we were so young.
As if we could ever be different.
As if time was going to forget about its teeth.
Waves from the ocean crash behind us.
I still hear them.
Your soft hand in mine.
Salt air is sticky on our sunburned skin.
I have kept this small golden rectangle of time.
Although you have left me for eleven summers.
The waves still crash on that sandy beach.
But I don't go there anymore.
I can't.
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Comments (14)
How powerful and how sad.
I can relate to this: "God we were so young As if we could ever be different." Powerful lines. A powerful poem!
Beautiful, Sabrina!
Well-wrought! It would be an apt description for a lost lover or a dearly departed friend.
Wow, beautifully poignant poetry here. The sense of longing for an idealized moment, now gone to the past is both palpable and relatable.
Heart creakingly beautiful. Nothing great ever stay. Single moments ofter carry more weight than entire lifetimes. Beautiful poem. Nicely Done!!!
This poem is beautifully written—the imagery of "waves still crashing" touches my heart as I think of places I will never visit again, yet time goes on, and its sadness feels familiar.
This reads like you're seeing each moment, one by one. This was very well-paced. There's a kind of sadness written between the lines. "Time forget about its teeth." I lingered on this line. 👌🏾😍 I like how you introduced sound afterwards. "Salt air is sticky on our sunburned skin." I've got so many favorite lines in this, but this one especially. This was so beautiful, Sabrina. 🤗🖤❤️
Heartbreakingly powerful
The heartbreaking reality that nothing great always stays. Great poem
Omgggg, this was soooo heartbreaking and relatable. You've written this so beautifully. Loved it so much!
This is heartbreakingly beautiful. I love the way you capture a single memory holding more weight than an entire lifetime.
Beautiful imagery and impactful emotions nice work ♥️
Beautiful poetry! Thank you!❤️