The Evening Masque
A Gothic Surrealist Rhyme, submitted to the "Masks We Wear" Challenge
At last I reached the evening masque
A lofty fête in which to bask
In the highest circles fit to task
Lords and ladies, all abounds
In every nook and corner of the grounds
Each partaking of its lavish bounds
Masks, it seemed, were all propriety
To these right and proper scions of society
To guise their luscious sin and gilt depravity
Drunken laughter rung the halls
As debutants gathered willing thralls
Through perfumed words and bawdy brawls
At once I seemed less than flamboyant
As other revelers became avoidant
For lacked I thus a mask in employment
As I thought to catch the fleeing splendor
I found a hope in a hidden vendor
Of masks which could suitable costume render
He stood in habiliments old and greyed
O'er a low table with his masks arrayed
His face hidden 'neath the ghastly mask of a Shade
"Come," said he, "I can provision
"The greatest mask to improve your vision
"Before these halls of such great derision."
Though afraid I was, my feet obeyed
That deathly fearsome mask of Shade
To procure a better face for which to trade
"Kind sir," said I, "I need your aid
"For I wish to match these faces displayed
"But I lack the tender to you persuade."
He laughed, just then, at my reply
"I need no tender, I can comply
"With your honest need for my supply.
"The Dove," said he, "is a good device
"Of graceful demeanor and kind advice
"To cloak a lust for many a vice.
"The Lion is loved by many a stud
"For bravery, will, and strength to flood
"A haughty heart engorged with blood.
"The Fox, I know, is a favorite, too
"To suit the whims of an ambitious few
"Who once had morals their dreams outgrew.
"These and more and can thus proffer
"To those in possession of sins to stopper
"And it is these faces to you I offer."
My heart beat fast with cold surprise
When my mind did sit on a new surmise
When I thought upon the Shade's disguise
"I have," asked I, "a question fairer:
"What lies below your mask much rarer
"That pallid visage of morbid terror?"
The Shade did laugh with rasping grim
"This mask is of a fabric ever slim
"For I, and only I, fill its brim.
"It occurs to me, from my humble station
"An offer, a far truer recommendation
"For a mask that suits your situation."
The Shade then reached beneath his coif
To pry his horrid gruesome mask off
Nothing showed within as it was held aloft
"See," said he, "what lies beneath!
"I am nothing but my shadow's sheath
"And this mask to you I now bequeath!"
I tried, then, failingly to understand
The absent specter seen firsthand
With his mask placed gently in my hand
And though he was just there before
The Shade vanished without one trace more
Except solely for his mask which I now bore.
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Comments (1)
I LOOOVE this! The rhyme scheme and the storytelling. It makes me want to know what happens when the character puts the Shade's mask on