tell me i'm gonna be ok
stream of consciousness challenge entry
There's a forgotten mug of tea in the corner.
It's the third one I've made and distantly I feel bad about wasting it.
Crouched in the corner like Gollum,
hyperfocused on something that is
little.
useless, really,
in the long run,
But if I can just control the small things,
If I can make the small things right, I can control
the Big Things...
right?
Because the Big Things feel so very out of my hands
and I'm stuck in my life like a beat-up tacoma in the mud.
Wheels spinning, spinning, spinning,
And I've gotten nowhere.
Can't you see my eyes are dead?
the sparkle in them
was buried along with my bleeding heart.
Surely, the spirals worn into my mind
are showing in my smile by now.
I can't do this much longer.
Show me somewhere to go.
Even if it's a path I'm scared to see the end of
at least I'll feel like I'm finally moving forward.
For pity's sake, someone tell me
I'm gonna be ok.
I despise pity, but if that's what it takes
to keep myself from burning,
my hands are out.
Tell me it's gonna be ok.
Tell me I'm gonna be ok.
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M. A. Mehan
"It simply isn't an adventure worth telling if there aren't any dragons." ~ J. R. R. Tolkien
storyteller // vampire // arizona desert rat
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I can't believe I haven't read any of you poetry yet. They're breathtaking! The similes are so good that you can visualize exactly what you're saying! the Big Things...right? Because the Big Things feel so very out of my hands- loved this line. It's written so smoothly and is so relatable- your poem is a masterpiece!
Gosh this was so relatable! Loved your poem!
M.A., this was brilliant. This line, "Surely, the spirals worn into my mind" is just so clear an image of mental struggle and the Tacoma's wheels too. Taking the idiom "pity's sake" too and breaking it down was inspired. I really felt this. Hope you're okay.