Sway with me, my love
we are
two buds that open to
the sun and call
the dawn out to the bees.
Sway with me and let
the wind come, love
this is the way we grow amid
the mix of ache and ease -
amid the rise and fall of life, you see
just like the snow caps on
the hill of ice and rain dust when
we slip
and fly
and ski...
this is the path that fate now sows for us
(and we will find our glow, my love)
we'll tilt and lean just like a tree.
*
Sway with me, my dear,
we’ll bend and dip
and make the most of what
is here for us, amid
the face of all our pain.
You and me -
we are
like root and leaf (as we)
soak up the rain left by
the wave and salt vein of
the bane that is
the sea.
*
Sway with me, my drop of gold -
my tuft of lion fuzz that is
a wish and sets
his wing with me into the sky - so free.
Sway with me and skip into
the sun and bud
-- for this is how we're born, my love --
to live
to let
to scar, to h e a l
to be.
*
Sway with me, my iris made
of star,
and plum,
and navy, deep, true blue -
for here (it’s only)
me and you amid the wind and all
the mist of what we're
put atop this jade and cyan orb
to sit,
to turn and spin;
to do.
*
Sway with me, I’ll be
your fan (and like)
the fern I am, I’ll lend
my leaf to fan your skin...
for I see in you a hope -
a seed,
and when I’m low, I know
you will not wait
to kiss my chin and take
the bulk,
the lade,
the lead, or grab the oar
and row.
*
Sway with me, (we’ll be)
two peas that open up to face
one star
of dawn:
the sun...
two buds that grow
and bend
--and fold--
and live the rock and pull
as one.
*
Gina C. 🧚♀️✨
About the Creator
Gina C.
Poet | Author | Architect of Worlds
Sowing stories rooted in culture, origin, metamorphosis, resilience, language & love via fantasy, myth, magical realism & botanical prose
Writing my novel!🧚🏻♀️🐉✨
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Comments (50)
Congrats on your honourable mention Gina! Terrific work. ☺️✍️
I see two flowers and hey I think to myself - this must be a love story. 'Sway with me...' almost sounds like an old/vintage theme song. Love it.
This is quite the thought provoking poem.
Congratulations on Top Story, deeply deserved. Had to come for a re-read.
Beautifully written! I recommend a short story https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/an-irrevocable-dream-about-a-mermaid%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
So beautiful. Trying to catch on all my reading and so glad I read this one first. Just lovely ♥️ Congratulations on Top story too ♥️
Like the fern I am, I'll lend my leaf to fan your skin. Gosh you have no idea how hard that line hit me! No, not in a bad way. But in a way where that's exactly who I am! It just resonated so deeply with me! Such a gorgeous poem!
you have a lovely story keep going sister
Nicely done! Enjoyed the read.
Probably the best poem I've read on Vocal. Love the flow and the metaphorical thread you sow throughout in a poetic rhythm that's light and heavy in tugs of clever. Nice work Gina.
Incredible work.
This is amazing!! So tender and beautiful 👏🏼
Congratulations, Gina! SO well deserved.
Especially loved this: Sway with me, my iris made of star, and plum, and navy, deep, true blue -
i truly enjoyed it!! Beautiful work
As soon as I saw this published I was like, "Yeah this is gonna become top story." Now check it out, it's a top story. Sometimes even though life isn't stagnant we probably do feel like plants, rooted down firm and that if we are uprooted that we may perish from our lack of lifeline support. The support? Financial, familial, marital (hope I spelled that right), occupational, etc. etc. Hell, I know that I feel trapped at my job sometimes cause even though I meet their exact requirements for higher positions that I'm striving for they tell me that I'm "unqualified," or that the "competition was too competitive." Excuse me, if You told me that the line of succession is chronological, then shouldn't I receive my turn to thrive in the sunlight like everybody else? Hell, I'm damaging my body just by doing my job, and a damn well job at that. Less I digress the seasons of life, the winds, the rains, the veins of salts and when the earth splits among its lines of fault, are all the more bearable when You have someone to help sway with You, this is true.
I knew I’d see this in top stories! I just can’t get over this one! So gorgeous! Congrats!
This is so fluid and enticing. Congratulations
Each of your metaphors for love speaks to the gentleness of love: how love should sway without judgment, reservation, or urgency, but that it may also be fierce. Not at all shocked that this was Top Story. Well-deserved and well done.
Well, yeah. Of course, its a top story. It's perfect. ❤
Congratulations on top story! Such an eloquent poem, I could feel the sway while I was reading
Congratulations on your Top Story💖🎉🎉
There it is! Congratulations on a beautiful Top Story, Gina!
Beautiful! Congratulations on Top Story! 👏
My oh my, Gina! You've done it again! This was so easy to drift along with and get caught up in the ebb and flow of the words and the deep and powerful meaning behind it all. Congrats, friend, on an awesome Top Story!