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Copper enriched skin
Temperate to his touch
Caress me slow
*my attempt to try new styles of poetry!**
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Jazzy
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Head of the Jazzy Writers Association (JWA) in partnership with the Vocal HWA chapter.
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Comments (12)
If you let me, I'll be that poetry nerd who would notice that for this poem to classify as a haiku you might want to double-check the syllables count :-D But as somebody who is not a big fan of syllables limitations and haikus in general, I would also say: let it be (or maybe sing let it go). Anyway, nicely done! Though copper-enriched skin, taken literally, sounds scary to me. Conjures up thoughts of conductors and them waving their menacing batons. Sorry, I just made a terrible pun.
Succinct and stunning. Well done
Haiku is so challenging, but you nailed it. This is excellent!
I knew you'd do well at haiku! Told you...written evidence of it. Well done, JAZZY!
You nailed this Haiku! Soooo beautiful!
Well done!
Beautifully written...
I love it!!!!
I’m loving this new style! Great Haiku. 👍🏽
Always great to try new things. Hot to trot.
Oh, boy, someone's juices are running all over the page! Very nice!
I love the imagery presented with this haiku!!