my illness keeps me thin
tap water keeps me docile
i don’t get horny anymore
and nowhere near as hostile
i can't eat what i want anymore
is that a penance or a blessing
the cause of this, i’m not exactly sure
just speculative home brand second guessing
i can't sit still for long anymore
i tremble i twitch and i shake
the past the now the future
the real the imagined the fake
i don't sleep real good anymore
my bladder and i are at war
i'm not sure who is actually winning
cause my pancreas forgot to keep score
i don’t know if i'm coming or going anymore
i'm concerned yes but not yet alarmed
i do enjoy these breaks from reality
in a shell protected unharmed
About the Creator
Bren
"It's just a token of my extreme!" - Frank Zappa
"Cause it's all in the heat of the moment It's all in the pain!!!" - Devin Townsend
Centre Stage with the wonderful Heather Hubler
I'm writing it out not acting in doubt!
Center Stage with Paul Stewart
*** I'm keen to republish the interviews I did for my series with Vocal creators. It's been a few years and I thought it might be nice to revisit these wonderful conversations. I'll be releasing them one at a time for a few weeks/months.
By Heather Hublerabout 18 hours ago in Interview
Comments (13)
Congratulations on having your story featured as a top story on Vocal! This is a remarkable achievement, and it's clear why your work has received such recognition. Your storytelling is truly exceptional. The narrative was not only compelling but also beautifully crafted, holding my attention from start to finish. The way you developed the characters and plot was masterful, making the story both engaging and thought-provoking. Your unique voice and perspective shine through, setting your work apart. It’s evident that you poured a lot of passion and effort into this piece, and it has certainly paid off. I look forward to reading more of your incredible stories in the future. Keep up the fantastic work! Best regards, Dr. Jay
congrats Top Story! nice..
It’s so well written I could feel your pain. It’s tough but I hope it’s nothing untreatable.
Oh I feel the echoes of this. Sorry.
first, congrats on TS. Now ... to be able to put into words, your emotions, your pain, and bewilderment, is genius. Brilliantly done. Hope you feel better soon but either way, please keep on writing. It's fantastic.
I am so sorry for what you are going through😢 Beautiful poem!
Such an interesting poem with some thought-provoking lines. The one that openedy eyes was "my bladder and i are at war." I had that issue going on back in 2018 and 2019. It was affecting my sleep. It ends up I had prostate cancer. We caught it early and I am fine now. It may be a good idea to have it checked out. Early detection is key. Congratulations on your top story. I have subscribed to you so I can see more of your work.
Oh this is painful 😣 I feel this too much I am sorry for your pain . Your craft here is exceptional
Very well crafted Congratulations on TS
This is really well done. Congrats on the TS.
Great poem; great Supertramp track (they seem to be perfect at any age, but especially now).
Every single one of these lines is more powerful than the last. "just speculative home brand second guessing" is such a perfect way to describe that situation. Great poem!
Your candid exploration of the physical and emotional struggles, combined with vivid imagery, creates a powerful narrative that resonates with readers on a profound level. Thank you for sharing such a personal and compelling piece that offers a glimpse into your experience.