Starkness approaches.
Trees disrobe to their black bones,
Their leaves lost to mists.
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"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
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Another haiku with powerful imagery, Rachel!
Might be your best one yet Rachel- I really like the second line a lot!
Ooohhhh!!! I like this one a lot! You seem to have done quite a few, so I’m glad to read these now. I wish I could cram in the imagery like this. If you ever need an apprentice lol!
"Trees disrobe to their black bones" is such an amazing line. Wonderfully done!
"Trees disrobe to their black bones." This is so vivid and haunting.
Wow! Maybe it’s not just me reading death into your autumn posey! This actually evokes the black, wet bark of late fall. Masterful writing, Rachel! Masterful!
Yet again… excellent Autumn haiku.
This is just autumn. In all its grace, intimacy and beauty. Well done, Rachel, my chum, as the Dharrone said you're on an absolute role. I will be Deeming this one as one of your finest.
This one sings in an autumnal voice. Deftly done, Deeming!
Whoaaa, from death dive, to striptease, now to disrobing! You're on a roll!