Standing Outside Your Window
Don't you want me anymore?
Homonyms sound the same
But their meanings split
And so did we
~~~~~
You opened the window
Called out like you cared
But when I came
You slammed it shut
I stood there
Lost in the cold
Don't you want me anymore?
~~~~~
You watch me
Through the window
Make eye contact
But no open door
I see you let others in
I used to have a key
Now they walk in
Where I once stood
Where I once laughed
Where I once mattered
~~~~~
I'm so sorry for being slow
Now I'm just a ghost
Outside your window
Would you close your curtains too?
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The emotional suffering is recorded well and poetically Well done Thank you. Hugs to you
Painful, relatable and conveyed with impact. "Would you close the curtains too?". Adding so many more layers of emotional pain. Blindness over discomfort. Belonging to displacement. Painfully and beautifully written.
Sounds like an avoidant personality type 🥴 Wonderful poem!
The homonym intro was a genius touch too. You really are the queen of sad poetry! 💖
marvelous!
I love your poetry, Dharrsheena. I savor it. ⚡💙Bill ⚡
Wow! You made me feel guilty. A fantastic poem. So emotional that it touches my core. Where did you find so much sensitivity and dedication? The truth is, I envy that. But I, however, will open my door and treat you to French fries with cheese. :)
Your poem captures the ache of emotional displacement with striking clarity. The shifting imagery of windows and doors powerfully reflects the transition from belonging to exclusion.
"But their meanings split And so did we" is a really cool line that I really liked here. This is questioning and sad, and will hit in the feels for anyone post-breakup no doubt!
This is painfully beautiful - and extremely relatable... "I see you let others in" and "Where I once mattered" really resonate with me.
Very sad, and all of us can relate to it. The feeling of being replaced.
"Where I once mattered" hit me hard. This is so beautifully written. Congrats on yet another TS! 💜
I love how you weave simplicity and depth together. Each stanza builds quietly toward heartbreak, and the restraint in your language makes the pain feel even more profound.
I love your style...homonyms and curtains...deliciously told
Raw and real writing, Dharrsheena.
So beautifully written with feeling. Loved it.
Yes close the damn curtains. Nobody wants to see none of that! Was this for a challenge very late the party here. Everyone gone home drunk and tired four weeks ago but what the hell, let’s get it staaaaaaaarted in here! Lose control of Body and soul!! 🎶 🎉😅😁 Also I’m sorry if this was similar to your experience! Perhaps a party was not such a good idea after all! 🤨 When’s ya new piece out.. Thought you said later today??
Love the meaning split and breakup metaphor. 💔
This feels so lonely!
I enjoyed this when you released it, but came back to drop my usual: Well-wrought!
Lovely and universally relatable!
I feel you beloved! Just keep being yourself! Beautiful stories are written from places of brokenness and obscurity! Congratulations on your TS and I look forward to reading more inspiring ones in the coming months! Just know that I often come hear to read your new posts! You matter to me. Congratulations once again my dear. You are a genius! Always you are!
✍️ Greetings, Dharrsheena! I am enjoying a few minutes reading Vocal posts. One of them is Darkos. She wrote a beautiful, personal Declaration of Independence. I want to encourage her, so I am sharing the linked piece. https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/years-of-slavery%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E 🔥Perhaps, the two of you might appreciate each other's writings. Have a wonderful day, lovely lady! 💙✍️✍️💙
Congrats on your top story!
I so see why this got a To Story! Your words painted such a heartbreak and girl, you drew me in with the homonyms!!!!