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Southern Goodbye

Even the seasons leave slowly down here. Wouldn’t want to be rude.

By Harper LewisPublished 2 months ago Updated 2 months ago 1 min read
Honorable Mention in The Sound of First Frost Challenge
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It slinks in slowly down here

in God's country, that first frost.

Southern seasons change softly, autumn and summer embrace like lovers, and then autumn does the goodbye ritual with the sun’s warmth:

when the sun says it’s time to go, September spills one last salacious secret, walks the sun to the door and lingers with it on the porch,

sipping sweet tea in rocking chairs all through October.

Autumn is still saying goodbye at the car after the last trick or treaters finish their candy.

Christmas music begins its mind-numbing monotonous repeat play in every retail outlet.

Cranberries soak in Grand Marnier while celery and onions languish in pans of butter, simmering like the promise of a first kiss after weeks of holding hands.

A cold rain falls as the sun shuts her door, but she rolls down her window, expressing her desire for autumn to tell her mama & ‘em hey and she loves them. She thanks autumn one more time for the pound cake wrapped in plastic on the front seat.

Autumn shouts, “Come back, ya hear?” as the sun rolls up her window.

The sun turns her key in the ignition,

and the first frost falls, only to melt a few hours later,

when she comes back

because she forgot her glasses.

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About the Creator

Harper Lewis

I'm a weirdo nerd who’s extremely subversive. I like rocks, incense, and all kinds of witchy stuff. Intrusive rhyme bothers me.

I’m known as Dena Brown to the revenuers and pollsters.

MA English literature, College of Charleston

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  • Marilyn Glover2 months ago

    I love what you did here, Harper; such wonderful imagery, and I agree with Heather about the ending. Congratulations on your honorable mention!😊👏❤

  • Wooohooooo congratulations on your honourable mention! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Heather Hubler2 months ago

    This was quite lovely and languid, like a gentle stroll. Congrats on the HM! And I got a chuckle out of the ending :)

  • Paul Stewart2 months ago

    This has a lot of deep sadness and longing, in plain sight hidden and loved your descriptions and that last line made me laugh! Congrats on the HM

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  • Ayesha Writes2 months ago

    The kind of piece that makes you pause mid-scroll and just breathe. 🌿

  • Love the roll-over of greetings, great imagery and capturing so much life

  • Bren2 months ago

    That reads so well, all homely and simple yet with a profound deepness. The line "simmering like the promise of a first kiss after weeks of holding hands." hit me right in the gut like a play punch! Kudos!

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