So far away (Original Version)
Before all the cuts and edits...
This was the original poem I wrote but since the challenge was limited to 75-125 words I had to cut it to bits. I feel like I lost so much of the poem that I decided to re-post the original. It's very hard to be in love with someone whose 6000 miles away, but God help me, I adore her.
The title of the poem was inspired by the below song, Carole King, "So far away"
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I wish that you were only
a hundred miles away
I would have no problem
driving that every day.
I hear my friends talk about
their dates, mates, spouses
and what have you.
But the woman I love
is six thousand
miles away from me
which makes me very blue.
I dream about the next time
that I can make that trip
for I've never wanted so badly
to kiss someone's lips.
The distance is a gut punch
with you oh so far away
I wish I could come there to Istanbul
and just stay.
Your beauty is like nothing that I have
ever known before.
If you would let me I'd be knocking
right now on your door.
We'd walk in the park holding hands
because no one would suspect we were lovers
because of the culture.
You would cook for me your famous chicken kebap
and I would eat until I practically popped.
We would ride the ferry
and feed the seagulls
and no one would need to know
we were in love, us two girls.
I know it may be wrong but I could live
in that closet again for you because
six thousand miles away is just so hard to do.
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About the Creator
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Sam Harty is a poet of raw truth and quiet rebellion. Author of Lost Love Volumes I & II and The Lost Little Series, her work confronts heartbreak, trauma, and survival with fierce honesty and lyrical depth. Where to find me
Comments (8)
Excellent! Now, I'd be delighted to share my own stories with you and hear your insightful feedback.
Lovely!!😍
When I first met my now wife, more than 22 years ago...I was in Glasgow, she was in Essex. Not the same distance, but I get the distance thing so much. This was heartbreaking and also such a loving ode. Those last few lines, were quite the gut punch really, Sam. This moved me and I hope the woman in question reads it and sees that your love is clearly shining through across many miles. Well done for sharing such an honest, and personal piece! And you make a pretty couple.
This brings to mind my own experience of so long ago. As a new college graduate just commissioned as a 2nd lieutenant in the Army I got married in Nov 1985 … two weeks before leaving for a year in South Korea. My fiancé/ new wife’s father wanted us to wait for that year before marrying, but she needed that security of the ring… as did I. That separation was tough, but we persevered and got through it. Now, 39 years later, we have 4 adult children and 8 grandchildren and are 7 days from that 39th anniversary. Be strong and don’t let the naysayers get in your head. Your poem is lovely, and, of course, also highlights a hurdle that my wife and I did not have to jump… But love is found where it is. Grasp it, hold it, mold it, nurture it. Best wishes.
So beautiful 🥹🥹
Beautiful. Perfect song to go with your poem.
Awww 😢♥️ This is lovely and kind sad. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Relationships are challenging in any instance but thrive with effort over any distance. Lovely, Sam.