Serpentine Clean
Surreal, Stream of Consciousness, Reverse Poem. For Poppy's Prompts Thingo #7
Minor, that chord, it sounds for us
Mirror, the chant, the fall's choir
The serpents gather for their feast
With empty eyes and honeyed tongues
Minor chord, in dissonance, a fall
That fall so high
The lies, like a newspaper man, I
Am the serpent... am I? The fall
Is mine... the chord is struck
The fall is mine.
The parallel of the man who had
Said it all and nothing at all
The newspaper man, who had
So the chord it sounds out
For me -the serpent who had the fall
I have become, what?
The opposite or parallel of the man
Who dressed the serpent, played
The fall.
Turpentine to clean
Serpentine gleam
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Thanks for reading!
Author's Notes: Based on the words in Poppy's Prompts Thingo #7.
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Every line of this is awesome Paul! It flows so addictively. So unique and full of talent.
Impressive weaving of words here, Paul! Inverse poems that have a double meaning intrigue me and this definitely accomplishes that
Whoaaa, you used those words so many times! Well done, Sir Paul! 🍩🥐
You employed a lot of symbols in this poem, Paul, almost dizzying in potential (double) meanings. The serpent and the fall, I am (name of God), the Greek chorus (choir), and a sense that all of us bear some responsibility for this messy state of affairs. But what struck me the most was the sense of double-talk, political speak, meaning buried in superfluous language. Of course that characterizes the stunning sophistry of this age: truth is what ever you want it to be, the loudest person in the room is always right, you get to have it your way, etc. Of course everything I just wrote might be a load of bollocks as well! 😳
Ours is an age in which the serpent often prevails! You have crafted a provocative poem once again, good sir!
Intriguing work. Im Getting cognitive dissonance just reading it!😄 Hope you are travelling well Paul.. how’s things.. saw somewhere you were going to some concerts or something..even Greenday??! Did that eventuate. I haven’t seen a good gig in years I think. Also love the Dali -esque picture here! 😃
Lovely the flow and image of ur poet
“The lies, like a newspaper man” sooo true!
Much symbolized - layered and at the same time open to interpretations. Great ❣️
Very, very good. I should check out challenges more.