Outside.
Remix of 'Now That We Don’t Talk' by Taylor Swift
You flash your plane ticket
Like some kind of trophy
Always with a packed suitcase
Always with a camera aimed
I heard your happiness
Shouted from the rooftops
And asked everyone I could think of
If it was real, if they thought
You ever even wondered about me
But I suppose it will
Forever be a mystery
Now that I am locked
Out of your life with
A dead bolted door
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You cut your hair
And sapped it of colour
Like you’d once done
To my confidence
From the outside
It looks like you have
Killed the old you
Almost as ruthlessly
As you assassinated me
I miss the girl
Without the plane ticket
The one who held kindness
But it is painfully obvious
That I don’t have a say
From where I stand
Outside your life
Stepping around the landmines
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People swear you lost
More than I did but
My reflection has scars
And shadowed eyes
I step on a landmine and know
You will never unlock that door
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What do you tell
Your family who
I once called mine?
Do you tell them about
The grave you dug for me?
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People agree you lost your empathy
And I start to wonder if
Maybe I always gave you
More credit than you earned
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And now that your life
Is not intertwined with my own
I don’t have to breathe around
A building scream
Count to ten every twenty seconds
Or swallow my own pain
In order to sate yours
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So I tuck my joy
Into the pocket of my jacket
And from where I stand
Outside your life
Away from your landmines
I realise
You lost more
Than I did
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Poppy
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH6 days ago in Critique
Comments (11)
I'm not a swifty but this song can "happily" stand alone, without the context of the song!! I'm still left breathless! The lines: "I don’t have to breathe around A building scream" Left me speechless! So beautifully tragic and well written, Poppy!!
Yes!! I’m a proud Swiftie so definitely loving this! Great remix, Poppy!
I've sworn off the Swift, but this poem is fantastic without any context of the song! Again, that ending...You're the queen of endings, my goodness. I can't pick out a favorite bit (other than the ending) but wow, Poppy. I love it.
I love what you did with the inspiration from the song!
So many lines in your poetry awe me. I especially liked So I tuck my joy, into the pocket of my jacket.
I was very loved by this! I am unfamiliar with Taylor Swift's songs however whatever inspired you was brilliant.
Great remix ✅… extremely emotive… I especially like: “ It looks like you have Killed the old you Almost as ruthlessly As you assassinated me”💙
I don't know if I know the song so will have to listen to that for context but your words here paint a picture of a relationship break down that I can visualise clearly.
Poppy's talent.
I loveeeeeeeeee that this song inspire your poem! Magnificent work!
Great retake on the Taylor Swift song, I often use music to inspire my words the most recent being "Paint The Sky With Stars"