Night Barking
A poem for Poppy's Prompts, January Edition
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It's 2am in witches' time.
Darkness encases me as I cough.
Fire! Fire! Fire!
There are no bullet holes
From my prolonged assault.
I wish to break out of barking
But my throat is tickled by dandelions
And their spores chase sleep.
My head pounds with each expulsion
And I knock against my sickness casing
Like the smallest of the Babushka Dolls.
Rattling to be free.
Let me out.
Release me now.
I am tired.
I long to rest my patchwork head.
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"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
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Comments (9)
This is really well done, and it seem you may not be feeling well. Love the metaphor.
This was so poignant and emotional. So happy that you used all the words from the prompt! Loved your poem!
This is so well done! “But my throat is tickled by dandelions“ is some great description! “ And I knock against my sickness casing Like the smallest of the Babushka Dolls.” That is a brilliant BRILLIANT use of that prompt!
"Like the smallest of the Babushka Dolls. Rattling to be free." Such a great line
Love this... "I am tired. I long to rest my patchwork head"
Wonderfully written!
That cold taken hold then? This is unpleasantly visceral.
Like the smallest of the Babushka Dolls. Rattling to be free. Let me out. Great phrasing!
Ooooh. love this. Very creative! Great entry for the prompt challenge thingo! :) Well done, Rachel!