My Traitor
To your traitor...
You break my heart and my hope
My every damage—and lost dream
Tattered heart, how would it cope?
Lost visions flowing down dark stream
Seems like my Nickname's 'Failure' now
My ruined land has your hand too!
I abandoned my smile, don't you know 'how'?
"You won't miss me", that was so true!
'Tis stiff now, every patch of my elastic skin
Seasons changed you to a hater
The 'HATE WAR', I'm never gonna win
I was blindfolded not to see you, my traitor
The ashes of my burnt letters
Your heart is my eternal debtor
'Love' was actually better than 'Hate'
You've lost me now— It is your fate!
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Author's note:
YOU, the one who's reading this— You are an amazing person <3
Thanks a bundle for supporting me and rooting for me...!
This poem is for everyone except me... IYKYK
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Maryam Batool
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'20/20'
"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
By Sean Callaghan6 days ago in Beat
Comments (8)
Your poetry inspires us to write 😊 Such a creative writer you are !
I love how you portrayed the pain and betrayal, well done sister!✨💕
What's up with these overwhelming feelings? Can I know what's causing these feelings?
I was about ask.. Is everything fine sis and then I read the author's note😶🌫 . Include me too!! Even the bitterness of betrayal was conveyed so beautifully ❤
This was so poignant yet so beautifully penned. Loved your poem!
Whoaa! Quite deep and insightful. The last line of your A/N got me laughing so hard 😆🤭 I hope you could find peace and a true love again in your life 😂..... Just kidding
Beautiful and sad words
Wow! Wonderful✨ beautifully conveys the pain of betrayal and the bitter transformation of love into resentment. Your use of metaphors and rhyme gives it a haunting rhythm, amplifying the emotions behind each line. The structure captures the shift from heartbreak to acceptance, especially with lines like "My ruined land hand has your hand too!" and "Your heart is my eternal debtor." Bahut achhi kavita hai! Mujhe bahut pasand aayi Keep it up my dear sister ✨😊👏