On this beautiful and rainy day,
I wish somebody would walk with me,
I wish somebody would hold my hand,
Somebody who wouldn't let me go astray.
At this beautifully somber hour,
I, respectfully submissive creature,
Keep rewinding lovely features
Of her face, so sweet and sour.
And at night, the charming stormy night,
I pretend to stay awake and chipper,
I await nightmares, my good old friends;
Yet, they're lurking in the shadows out of sight.
Melancholy, she's so warm and healthy,
We can dance with her throughout the storm.
These emotions—they are dust and foam,
Their intentions are diaphanous and stealthy.
I recall some things that never happened,
Thus, obliged to act as if they did.
I recite these lines as though I'm happy,
And as if my heart can't ever bleed.
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Brilliant work! Loved the line "And as if my heart can't ever bleed."
Really beautiful, and you really master your rhythm and rhyme, without ever making it overbearing. Almost reminds me of an old Italian song that goes "malinconia ninfa gentile, la vita mia consacro a te": Melancholia, gentle nymph, my life I devote to you!" and it's set to a very fast and upbeat rhythm, but the melody is in a minor key.
I love that you are writing new things. I too identify with it a lot! There is a certain perverse glee ..I think Tolle said something like that - in regard to these states… The personification also works splendidly! 🙌☺️
As if my heart can't ever bleed. That line cut so deep. Your poem resonated so much with me. It was so heartbreaking!
Andrei, this was an emotional piece for me. I could visualize the imagery you portrayed and felt the passion within it. I'm really quite terrible at interpreting poetry but my interpretation of this was the struggles of having to mask your true emotions in a world that doesn't accept you for you. Then the feelings of loneliness that you are left with because you can't be who you want to and I don't feel like anyone can relate to you. Which was really sad and relatable to me! A great and very well written poem all around! Great work Andrei!
Ahh, Andrei. Nice job! This was just like the title suggests. I loved the line, "I await nightmares, my good old friends."