In the Garden
A Haunted Echoes Challenge Entry
By Cindy CalderPublished 4 months ago • Updated 4 months ago • 1 min read
The stench of carcass
'Midst the dead flowers and weeds
Lays bare our foul deeds
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Cindy Calder
From Charleston SC - "I am still learning." Michelangelo
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Dark and striking, this haiku turns a simple garden into a graveyard of conscience. The imagery is chilling.
Wow! Great example to lead by. Haunting echoes is going to be another fun challenge! Well done, Cindy!
I felt this one, Cindy! In love how you rhymed the 2nd and 3rd lines! Wonderful haiku! Good luck on the challenge!
This hits straight on. It’s tough but honest.
Magnificent work, Cindy! Sinister and beautiful at the same time.
This carries hints of Autumn in here as well, only this one is dark....very dark. Love it
I am probably wrong, but when I read your title and poem, I thought of a cemetery of sorts falling into ruin which is a shame. Good job.
I love how the title depicts something beautiful. Yet in the first line of this haiku. Something dies. Leaving it's shell. Love the imagery in the second line. The 'midst' brought a tender poetic touch to the dead flowers and weeds. For the foul deeds. That is truly terrifying to think of. That we return to the dead things, only for our secrets to be revealed. I am very impressed and very much Inlove with the solid doom this inflicts 🤗❤️
Oof, this one cuts sharp! Brutal but beautifully so. That garden isn’t growing veggies—it’s growing regret. 💖
Wow, that's pretty haunting, Cindy!
And that's a haunting echo of the human condition. So well done, Cindy.
Sublime. You managed to convey so much in so few words - truly impressive entry, Cindy! I love that last line especially!
Oooo, that last line was so deep. Loved your poem!
Subtly sinister! Most impressive, Cindy!