if timing was water
you’re still the right person
but we were two dahlias in a world
made for sunflowers, together,
we grew in each other’s light,
planted seeds, sprouted buds,
started a garden,
but to blossom,
we also
needed
rain
About the Creator
Daniel K
I write love poems about the girl who has a hold over my heart and my life in such a way that neither are my own anymore. The girl I would choose over and over and over again. I love her, and that is the beginning and end of everything.
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Day 4 of Quitting
If this is how sobriety feels, maybe it’s better to go through life a little buzzed… this, along with other hits like, I want to kill myself, I wish I was dead, and I’m going to throw myself off a bridge have been the only thoughts on rotation these past few days. I promise myself that if, in a month, I still feel like this (‘this’ meaning despondent, full of rage, and simultaneously numb) I can go back to smoking. Until mid-February though? Nicotine is off the table.
By sleepy drafts7 days ago in Longevity
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Such a beautiful poem about nature and growing flowers. I am learning about the different types of poetry, This is an education all in itself worth coming to vocal for, Now the Nonet, I hope they have another challenge of that again, so I can practice. Beautifully done. Well deserved placement.
Beautiful imagery using sunflowers and dahlias… well deserved Runner Up placement in the challenge 🤩.
This is utterly breathtaking, start to finish. I was marvelling over those first two lines but then the rest was equally gorgeous. Big congrats on placing!
Oooh! This is beautifully written! Congrats!!
I love the journey of this. You told so much story in just 9 lines ! Well done and congratulations on your challenge placement 🥹😇💜🌟👌
What a unique and lovely nonet poem - congratulations on your win!
Beautiful piece. Congrats.
Lovely piece. It’s so poetically sorrowful. Congratulations!!🎈🎊🎉
beautiful. congrats on the runner-up!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Magnificent nonet. Insightful and real. Loved it!
Loved the imagery of this. That ending was sorrowful yet beautiful. Amazing writing!