Hollow
For Kayleigh Fraser's "One Of Us" Unofficial Poetry Challenge!
If tomorrow starts without me,
and you're right here taking it all in,
letting your intrusive thoughts win,
and thinking about what it would be like otherwise,
I'll let you know that you got me.
Right there in that intrusive thought,
in the air you breathe in,
on the library floor, among the pile of books.
I want you to know that I had you,
till the very last breathe that I breathed,
as the evening sky turned pink,
and the night fell upon us like every other day,
if tomorrow starts without me.
About the Creator
Nafisa Ashraf
The first story I wrote at the age of seven was pasted on our storage room door. I've written short stories, and poems but never published any except a few on my blog. So I'm starting my publishing journey here.
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Comments (7)
Love this 💜
Very touching poem. Well done!
This is such a lovely poem. Congratulations on being selected 2nd place on the Emerging Creator leaderboard this week!
What a delightful entry to the challenge.💖 My favourite lines are: “Right there in that intrusive thought, in the air you breathe in, on the library floor, among the pile of books.”
Beautiful piece. Well done.
Great piece! I love the reassurance the narrator provides to the subject of the poem to help cut through intrusive thoughts!
Another unique take on the prompt, well done 🙏🏻🤍