His Haibun
and my first
He does not like poetry; I write it anyway and do not tell him. It's true his face is not a poet's face. It is round and open, youthful; too apt to be compared to the sun. His nose is neat. It is impossible to imagine him smoking a cigarette, terse, full of cheekbones and tension. His warmth burns my fingertips. I am here for his fascinating body, the haphazard freckles I touch one by one; he is here for my eyes, just my eyes. A sunbeam sneaks through the curtains and pierces us both, sizzling the spices of his skin. I inhale and wrap myself in him. He kisses my eyes.
I will lose him soon
Somewhere a clock is ticking
I hear it at night.
This is my first-ever attempt at a haibun. I only learnt about the form about an hour ago, but immediately loved it. Let me know what you think in the comments. :)
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Superb!!
Beautiful very sensitive Congratulations on Top story !
Great work and congrats on TS!
omg this is so cute
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This poem makes such a wonderful use of the haibun form! The ending haiku's focus on the 'ticking' of time makes the prose portion even weightier, reinforcing how the speaker's and the subject's reasons for being 'here' don't quite mesh. Fantastic piece!
Has a great microfiction feel. Congratulations on top story.
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Your first attempt or first success?! This is breathtaking. I had a feeling I was going to love it based off the photo you chose. I've never actually heard of a haibun so I had to search it up. You did fantastic! Congratulations on top story :) Never stop writing, please.
I love this! I've never heard of this format, so I had to look it up (consider me educated on this beautiful form, so thank you TheSpinstress), but you did an excellent job on your first attempt. This makes me want to go educate myself on different poetry forms.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Tell me more about the form!
Top story for the new attempt, congrats keep doing new and unique!!!!
I love ❤️ love love it!!!! This has such an urgency and brilliant structure. I don't usually gush. But this is gush worthy.
You have certainly peaked out interest. congratulations on your top story
Congratulations 🎉. Keep up the fantastic work.
Haibun...what is that. Learning a lot here. Will check it out, wow those freckles keep popping up. So cute.
"sizzling the spices of his skin" - what a great description that is! I know nothing about haibuns. I thought it was similar to a man-bun but they are very different.
Whoa, Spinstress! This is an excellent piece! Transfixing from start to finish! Not familiar with the form so I’m going to have to do some research!!
Well done on your first attempt at a haibun! The sincerity and depth of your words shine through, thank you very much for sharing, love your works, hope to read more, subscribed.
I've heard of a Haibun before but never tried! I feel you executed it brilliantly! I loved it!
So powerful!
Our time is limited, so it's important to cherish each and every moment with the people we love .
I like it!! I looked up haibun and read the most famous example that they provided. 👏 good job! I might try one & thanks for sharing.😍
I like your poem, it's funny, and lovely.