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Snafu Senryu

By Andrew C McDonaldPublished 2 years ago 1 min read

Went for the pop fly

Sun beaming right in my eyes

Ball to head, game lost

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Author's notes: Written for the Snafu Senyru Challenge.

The Prompt

Capture the essence of an awkward moment in a senryu poem.

We recognize that some interpretations of our past haiku challenges were actually senryu, not haiku. The Snafu Senryu challenge is about honoring the senryu poetry form in all its painfully human glory. A senryu is a traditional Japanese form of poetry that, like a haiku, consists of three lines with a 5-7-5 syllable pattern. However, while haiku often focus on nature or seasonal changes, senryu revolve around human nature and emotions, often with a humorous or ironic twist.

The theme of this challenge is "awkward moments." Delve deep into those uncomfortable, sticky situations we've all found ourselves in to capture the essence of that experience. A senryu is meant to highlight human quirks and emotions, so ensure your senryu has a personal or emotional touch. Humor, irony, or wit is welcome, though not mandatory.

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About the Creator

Andrew C McDonald

Andrew McDonald was a 911 dispatcher for 30 yrs with a B.S. in Math (1985). He served as an Army officer 1985 to 1992, honorably exiting a captain.

https://www.amazon.com/Killing-Keys-Andrew-C-McDonald-ebook/dp/B07VM843XL?ref_=ast_author_dp

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  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarran2 years ago

    Ouch, that must have hurt as well! 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

  • Lynda Spargur2 years ago

    Always love a baseball poem. This one rings true for many a game. LOL

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