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Celestial gaze,
Warming veins of thin skin on
Glide to gentle death.
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Comments (14)
Oh I am crying for them, no matter the gentleness! Great work, loved this❣️💕
Great imagery in the haiku, Rachel!
The veins is a good comparison, and works really well with the idea of death in the last line too.
What amazing imagery, Rachel. Such a well-woven haiku and response to the prompt.
Very swell! How good are the veins? Shows we are connected right?! 😄
Well-wrought! Evokes the warmth of the sun on a cool fall day. One of my favorite sensations.
Wow - I just mentioned some favorite haikus of mine in the Lift Your Voices thread, but hadn't seen this one yet!! Brilliant, evocative work...amazing as usual, Rachel!!
"Celestial gaze" opens so hard, I love it! I really can't get over how beautiful this haiku is.
Beautifully written. It almost makes death sound enticing, elegant, and peaceful.
Feels like a meditation on God and our place in the universe done with beautiful minimalism
Good lord, Rachel! This evokes the frailty of old age so powerfully. Warming veins of thin skin caused me to remember my mother’s hands. Damn, you are an amazing writer. Each haiku better than the last. I’d say good luck again on the challenge but I’m not sure you’ll need it.
You’re certainly on fire with autumn’s haiku!🤗
That last line made it seem very graceful. Loved this!
God, chum. That final line is devastating, beautiful and just - gorgeous. I love when you poem like a pro! Hope you're doing okay, Rachel? Is the work situation any better? No idea if that's okay to ask, but just deciding you will know I mean it with kindness and concern. Hope this sudden burst of creativity means that my lovely chum is doing a bit better!