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fall transmuting burnt-
out green of summer
soon into red gold
-R. Angeli
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Make the universe your companion, always bearing in mind the true nature of things--mountains and rivers, trees and grasses, and humanity--and enjoy the falling blossoms and scattering leaves.
One should know that a hokku is made by combining things.
The secret of poetry lies in treading the middle path between the reality and the vacuity of the the world.
One must first of all concentrate one's thoughts on an object. Once one's mind achieves a state of concentration and the space between oneself and the object has disappeared, the essential nature of the object can be perceived.
When you are composing a verse, let there not be a hair's breadth separating your mind from what you write. Quickly say what is on your mind; never hesitate a moment.
Composition must occur in an instant, like a woodcutter felling a huge tree, or a swordsman leaping at his enemy. It is also like cutting a ripe watermelon with a sharp knife or like taking a large bite into a pear.
Is there any good in saying everything?
-Matsuo Basho (1644-1694) From his treatise on poetry, LEARN FROM THE PINE
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sunt lacrimae rerum et mentem mortalia tangunt
There are tears of things, and mortal objects touch the mind.
-Virgil Aeneid I.462
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Comments (16)
I loved your haiku, very creative word-age there!! Great work Rob!
DAMN, mic drop. "Transmuting" is a perfect choice. And you have the breath pause too...A perfect haiku, my friend. Love that you included info on the form too; always good to know about the form you're writing in! Not that I'd expect anything less from you. ;)
👏 Angeli: I envy your skill of creating beautiful word still lifes. Distilling an essence yet leaving its magnificence is no easy thing. 🧡👏🧡
writing skills are truly impressive
Wonderful haiku and I love after stuff.
I'm pretty obsessed with this haiku, Rob! Gorgeous work! Also love the quote from Basho! Going to explore further.
Your Haiku reminded me of this line from Taylor Swift's song, Daylight: I once believed love would be burning red, but it's golden. I loved your Haiku!
Excellent!
Matsuo is very wise. Thoughts are fleeting, they come in fast and rush away like the wind. Catch and harness them fast. Vaey true. This Haiku is so whimsical, I so love fall leaves, even the bareness of winter has its beauty. And i just got an idea for a poem. Fascinating, is it not.
Great imagery.
Nothing about your work is generic.Beautifully written and symbolic on many levels. Stunning 🤍
lovely haiku and words about hokku -- thanks for sharing the wisdom -- chomp -- a juicy pear!
Like red gold! Fantastic haiku!
Stunning 😍
Wonderful poem :) Hard disagree on the “ Quickly say what is on your mind; never hesitate a moment” part of the educational aspect lol If I did that, none of the poetry I write would be any good lol
Wow… I loved this imagery! Your way with words is so vivid 😃 Awesome!!