No longer whispering but shouting
What does my heart say to you?
Ripples course! Muscles tear. PAIN
Body yielding (still us!)
One push more.... there! You.
Now no longer
We. I look
and find
Me.
~~~~~
Written for the Vocal Breakup Challenge.
Comments welcome.
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Judey Kalchik
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'20/20'
"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
By Sean Callaghan6 days ago in Beat
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Just beautiful.
Oh I adore that ending especially. So impactful
Woohoo a unique and optimistic one Judey. Brilliant interpretation- and those last lines about when you look you now find ME! Charming and poignant. So glad you shared it with me! ๐๐๐๐
beautifully craftedุ like the use of alliteration
Beautiful. Learning to trust the heart to find yourself can be both scary and hard. I felt this poem so hard
Never seen this term before, but I want to try it now. Lovely piece.
Amazing! Love your use of formatting and the alliteration and rhyme in the last four lines!
The pain of parting ways.
mmm love when people are able to find the "me" after a "we." โค๏ธ
Oh, this is wonderful. Well done.
Ooooh. Every single poem I've read for this challenge has been absolutely brilliant, thus far. I am now feeling the heat against my own first entry lol. This is just another one to add to the hard-to-choose-from pile. I love how you used the formatting to give it extra life, despite the constraints of the word count. Well done, Judey!