Forsaken
(Again)
Note: This poem is another entry in Real Poetic's Mini Challenge which you can find here. The Prompt: Explore the theme of your greatest fear.
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I am used to
Watching time slowly
Stitch all my cuts closed
It has a slow but steady hand
One I have cursed more
Than thanked
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But now my wound
Seems to go untended
The world turns mercilessly
But offers me no new beginnings
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I am confined in the past
To the point of claustrophobia
Clawing at closed doors
Craving closure and
Receiving ignorance
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There are pictures on my phone
Of two best friends promising
Each other forevers
There are letters in a box
From a girl who used to
Swear she’d never leave
There are memories in my head
That consume me like a sickness
Clogging my lungs like smoke
Filling my eyes like allergies might
Squeezing my heart with
Relentless cruelty
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You are my last straw
My final breath
My breaking point
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You play on repeat
Inside my brain like
A vicious nightmare
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And I am hopelessly
Terrified that I will never
Be able to get over how
You walked away without
A single trace of
Compassion
(You used to have
So much of it)
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"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
By Sean Callaghan8 days ago in Beat
Comments (28)
Oh Poppy, this is breathtaking and so full of emotion. 🥹❤️ Truly wonderful job! Congratulations on Top Story!!
amazing piece, loved it!
Awesome. Really touching. Great stuff, thanks.
Wow. This resonates deeply. Thank you for writing this 🤍
Congratulations on top story 😊💕
Damn, felt every single line and word of this poem. Great work on the prompt with this one. Well done!
Poppy this was intense and melancholic! It felt passionate and driven with every word, so beautifully articulated! A very emotional and tantalizing piece! Great work!
Worth reading, grinded emotional flow. Love it deeply
Hauntings if the past live in our preseht. Surreal, yet real oietey. Congratulations 🥇
This was gorgeous. This line hurt to read (but in a good way!) "You are my last straw, My final breath, My breaking point"
I love the analogy of the confinement to the past to claustrophobia. Congratulations on Top Story!
This is awesome. Well deserving of top story.
Wow, an amazing poem. Congratulations on top story, heart-rending experience of separation, and the times that were and could have been. Bravo!
enjoyed u deserve likes
enjoyed very much! A bit dark, but feels very real and connected.
Beautiful piece. Congrats on the TS
I felt every line in this poem. Powerful, heartbreaking entry to the challenge. Congratulations!
Congratulations on your bleak Top Story🎉❤️💯😉📝👍
Heart breaking and raw, a very sad vignette of a truly lovelorn time. Excellent work❤️
So glad this got Top Story, Poppy! Yay! 🥂
Gorgeous work 😩😭❤️
Lovely, sad and always that elusive love.
Clawing at closed doors, craving closure. This is sooooo me. And that is why I'm still stuck in the past. Loved your poem!
My best friend & one time beloved was unable to say she loved me, walked away, & no longer speaks to me. This fearsome haunting has continued for over four decades.
Ugh, me too. This was so well written.