email exchanges with the moon
a poem (also a submission for the moon challenge (?))

Re: Your Poem, Monday 9:12 pm
The Moon to Me:
I regret to inform you
your poem arrived
too muddy with fingerprints
You keep calling me a miracle
but forget the men
who planted a flag
in my throat
& called it arrival
called it a giant leap for mankind
as if falling upward
were something new
You keep writing of hands
try again this time
without gravity
Re: Your Poem, Monday 9:46 pm
Me to The Moon:
Hey dude
You speak like someone
who has never dreamt of
the dark side of the moon
Every time I reach for light
I come back
with dirt under my nails
Maybe that’s the point
to stay human is to keep
a little earth in the mouth
so even prayer tastes
of home & iron
I send these poems your way
because what else can I do
with the dark but build
a small country inside it
Re: Your Poem, Tuesday 10:31 pm
The Moon to Me:
I have read your poem again,
& regret to inform you
that it trembles too much
They said one small step but forgot
how many graves it takes
to build a ladder
Re: Your Poem, Tuesday 11:56 pm
Me to The Moon:
once / when i was five / my mother left the lights on / said it keeps the ghosts away/the next morning / she was asleep on the floor / her palm open / like a cracked cup / i tried to pour the morning back into her /i am writing to you / because that same week / my mother / and her mother / adorned themselves in two-dollar sarees / twirling in a thrift store/ turning grief into glitter /suddenly junkyard artists / i had no language / only the rusted music / of inheritance / so i write / because that’s what i am / a junkyard artist / soldering memory / into meaning / i hope you understand/ mouth is a wound / where god opened us up / sometimes i open the fridge / just to see what shines / butter / beer cans / tinfoil ghosts /yes there is conceit/ in sitting down and writing about this /but there is conceit in writing at all / i’m still learning / thanks to you /how to live with the light / that doesn’t stay /
Re: Your Poem, Wednesday 12:42 am
The Moon to Me:
I regret to inform you
you were foolish enough to love
one place now you are an orphan
in a succession of shelters
they tell me you sleep well
the nights you press your face against
the granite in your kitchen and pretend
to be lichen trying to grow there
even Kahlo had to earn
her strangeness so what is with
you poets and the soft animal
of your bodies
you ask what keeps me bright -
i keep what cannot be buried
into the marbled skin of the earth
if there is a god here
he’s learning english from your letters
he keeps mispronouncing mercy
Re: Your Poem, Friday 1:19 am
Me to The Moon:
these are winter months
it’s the wrong season
to have a crush but
everything is possible
in the quickening dark
our bodies silver thanks to you
everything is possible
I think (?) with my body
but not always with language
I have lived here for eight years
and yet I am shocked every time it rains
only now my shock has years of rain in it
how the lit houses swallow half
the yawning sky the night not lit by you
***
About the Creator
Mesh Toraskar
A wannabe storyteller from London. Sometimes words spill out of me and the only way to mop the spillage is to write them down.
"If you arrive here, remember, it wasn't you - it was me, in my longing, who found you."
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Comments (9)
Love, love, love everything about this. Brilliant!
This is beyond genius art!!
I am out of my league here telling you what an absolute dream this entry is...
Great
This is outstanding and truly original. You have such a powerful voice. I loved many parts, but I found the lines “so what is with you poets and the soft animal of your bodies” the most moving. Such beautiful, evocative imagery... Thank you for sharing your art with the world :)
I really like your take on this challenge, so creative, great work!
holy shit, this: my mother / and her mother / adorned themselves in two-dollar sarees / twirling in a thrift store/ turning grief into glitter /suddenly junkyard artists junkyard artists?! So worthy of repetition there. And actually just all of it like i hope you understand/ mouth is a wound I love that you didn't use any articles there, just mouth, and and yet I am shocked every time it rains only now my shock has years of rain in it like ughhhhh that's so good OK, now I'm being a jerk because I want to give unsolicited feedback because this poem really shines and there's just one thing my curiosity wants to play with to see if it would explode: What if the timestamp sequence was going in reverse? Like it starts out "Re: My Poem," but time rewinds and the last stanza is the initial email with the first email, "My Poem", the poem to the moon? Idk idk though this is so good and I loved it.
Oh Mesh, I am beyond happy to see your name appear again, and here you are. You drop by, leave diamonds, then move softly on. I can’t dissect this succinctly so allow me just one or two indulgences: you ask what keeps me bright - i keep what cannot be buried — I want to frame this and put it on my wall. We learn the muddy fingerprints are from the dirt in your fingernails you mention later. I adore your prose section. I tried to pour the morning back into her—wow! And the whole junkyard artist metaphor is brilliant! The whole idea of making something, anything, from scraps of life, from memories, and -‘mouth is a wound / where god opened us up / sometimes i open the fridge / just to see what shines’ what an analogy 😮 The wound opens and …. But then, your line ‘i’m still learning / thanks to you /how to live with the light / that doesn’t stay /‘ tied in with moon’s light, is a heart wrenching gut punch. This one’s a winner 🥰
If this doesn't win first place, I am going to throw an absolute fit.