Death comes so swift and quick
It's like a heart-stopping trick
One second alive
The next has arrived
And off to the great unknown we go, so sick
About the Creator
Twyla
Creative Writer | Currently writing my debut novel | Single mom of one handsome son | Full-time employee | Full-time college student | Love writing horror and fantasy | I write for myself and share with you guys! Hope you enjoy it. 🖤
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Compelling and original writing
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On-point and relevant
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Comments (2)
Twyla's poem is very impactful and captures the suddenness and inevitability of death in a poignant way. The use of short and simple lines creates a sense of urgency and emphasizes the finality of death. The metaphor of death being like a heart-stopping trick is effective and conveys the shock and surprise that often accompanies a sudden loss. The ending line "And off to the great unknown we go, so sick" is haunting and leaves a lasting impression. Overall, Twyla has done an excellent job of conveying the weight and gravity of death in this powerful poem. If you'd like, you can also check out my take on this challenge: https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/embracing-life-s-absurdity%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cstyle data-emotion-css="w4qknv-Replies">.css-w4qknv-Replies{display:grid;gap:1.5rem;}
God grant us a good end 🤲