Dancing in a fog
Releasing my current state of mind
I feel like I am dancing in a fog,
a dance I used to know,
but the steps slip away,
the tune half-remembered,
out of reach.
Perhaps the melody has changed,
updated without me,
whilst I was busy mourning,
busy grieving,
busy crying,
busy counting the countless
mistakes I could not undo.
I grew smaller each day,
more fragile,
as though alive yet not living,
hidden in a cave
where light no longer reached,
where time spoke only of loss.
What happened to me?
How did the music fade?
Will I ever emerge from this fog
to move freely again,
to find the rhythm I once knew,
to let the world
be bright with my song?
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Susan Fourtané
Susan Fourtané is a Science and Technology Journalist, a professional writer with over 18 years experience writing for global media and industry publications. She's a member of the ABSW, WFSJ, Society of Authors, and London Press Club.
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This is so moving and sad. I hope you get your spark back ❤️
so touching and beautifully expressed Yes You will be brought into the pure light of Yours again I have been there too million times connect to planetes stars Moon they will guide you through it all to become One and dancing reborn from the new as if creating a new tune ❤️🌞😊🔥Wishing You more beautiful days to come much Love and Hugs !
You description was wonderful, but I hope the fog lifts soon.
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
E.K. wrote my thoughts!
Fog is unique in that it can be beautiful and mesmerizing when viewed from a distance but when you're in the middle of it, it distorts our view and makes it difficult to find our way through. This poem is powerful in that it describes that difficulty very well. Brilliantly written.
Absolutely sublime writing my dearest Susan. You are a top notch writer and I always enjoy reading your work.
Blessings to you, my friend. Great poetry! ⚡
This is so relatable. Fog is beautiful, and can hold its mysteries, but I hope it lifts for you. <3
Praying that the fog is lifted permanently and swiftly! 🙏🏾 Hugs 2 you my friend!
Simply wonderful. Sincere, poetic, profound. I enjoyed every line
Very relatable!
I've been feeling a little like this lately as well. I hope your fog lifts soon!
Dancing in a fog a dance you used to know So you can’t see exactly which foot to move first A very gripping opening into your minds melody And the fog as a metaphor was a fine choosing * ‘Updated without me.’ This line was like abandonment reincarnated. Was like happiness left you to call after it. For you to make a map to find its whereabouts, what a terrible thing. Your mistakes made you grow smaller. This line touches my own heart. Susan. Each line after the one mentioned above was like tears falling. Especially when you asked what happened to you. Sending you lots of hugs, this was outstanding! ♥️🤗
I often feel I am in a fog and just keep going
The fog will be lifted eventually. Sending you lots of love and hugs ❤️