Photo Credit: David Prasad, "San Joaquin River Trail," Flickr
Each time I dream of you, I wonder at God.
Conjuring it now, I can’t say I’m withered in California soil, more
listing toward it, thirsty, admiring your steadfast faith.
I am almost ready to return.
Pray the canyon takes me back, and the girl with golden hair
swimming in a valley lake living fine without me.
Enter in, shade-self. I’ve been changed across the looking-glass of dreams.
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Mackenzie Davis
“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll
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I remember this. So vivid, so beautiful, yet still mystery in it, but definite heartbreak and grief and sadness. Hugs for this one. Thank you for redirecting me to it!
Reading around to learn about acrostic poetry. Kind of sad, however, nicely Done!!
Ahhhhh, another masterpiece. I keep not realising these are eclipse acrostics because they just seem so natural and not confined by any rules. This is so alluring and mysterious. My favourite part is: "Pray the canyon takes me back, and the girl with golden hair swimming in a valley lake living fine without me."
This was so heartbreaking 🥺 Are you okay? Sending you lots of love and hugs ❤️
It's painful, what our subconscious keeps doing to us. This made it lovely, too.
I’m still thinking on the title and subtitle, which made me immediately think along the lines of a relationship, but combined with the picture and acrostic, it feels like someone longing for a past self, maybe someone they left behind? They want to return and are ready to, but they’re changed. Not sure haha 🤷🏽♂️ But that’s what came to me😊
the last line - 💙
Wow, this was raw and bleeding. Beautifully penned :)
"Shade-self" is pretty heartbreaking. The last line is a masterpiece.
My heart. My heart. This is incredible, with sadness.