Born of the dark -Raised to the light
The final chapter
In shadows depth
I breathe the silence
Like mist above dark waters
repentance weaves illusions
of salvation
of hope
of forgiveness
But I was born of the dark
light was never mine to hold
forever beyond my grasp
I exist like a shade
transparent
ignored
abandoned
alone
Satan was never a friend
only an unwanted companion
a poison voice, whispering
reminding me of my worth(less)
kindness is all I sought
longing for truth
pleading for redemption
I stole naught but my youth for want of freedom
from release of pain
from an unwanted life
from loneliness
I never wished to be born
forced to tread the waters of
Deceit
Drugs
Abuse
Addiction
where is my light?
Savior, abandon me not.
I beg of you
envelope me within your warm embrace
before I wane.
mine eyes are heavy
my soul fades to the grey
luminescent rays pierce the blackness of my life
and shines upon my soul
brilliant dews of light
cascades like ripples across water
I feel a glow within my heart
Angels whisper before the dawn
‘you who were born of the dark, now rise to the light
be at peace my child
for no longer shall you be alone'
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Jason
Recommend listening to this while reading.
This is the final installment of this series:
About the Creator
JBaz
I have enjoyed writing for most of my life, never professionally.
I wish to now share my stories with others, lets see where it goes.
Born and raised on the Canadian Prairies, I currently reside on the West Coast. I call both places home.
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH4 days ago in Critique
Comments (27)
'envelope me within your warm embrace - before I wane.' There's something about that line that made me tear up. It's a desperate plea for salvation but also acceptance and care; to be held like a child again. Wow JBaz - excellent poem!
Not sure how I missed this one. And wow! This took me in circles and landed comfortably in a great place. Nice affect, J! And happy belated congrats!
Jason, I loved the transition from dark to light with the angel's cry. Indeed, a breath of fresh air to go along with the light. Congratulations on your top story! The song paired perfectly, btw, adding so much emotional weight. I felt it. Then I felt it lift at the end of your poem.
FEELING A RUSH
Why did I just feel a rush through my body reading this poem? It's very beautiful I love it🩷🩷🩷
Jason, I love the transition in this one as it goes from melancholic to hopeful!! Very well written, it was captivating and so well deserving on your TS!! Congrats, btw!!
This was deeply moving—raw, haunting, and ultimately full of grace. Your journey from shadow to light is felt in every line. Thank you for turning pain into poetry and reminding us that even the darkest night ends in dawn. 🕊️✨
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
If ever a story was meant to be Top Story, this is it! Beautifully executed!!
Resonating and powerful!!
Congratulations to Top Story !! We'll deserve!!! What a powerful piece!!! Wow
congrats top
So glad this made it to the top. Congrats buddy!
Lovely, Jason Gave me goosebumps with the last lines
A fierce reminder of how hard some people's lives really are, Jason. It is filled with compassion and understanding and ends with hope. This poem sees life as it is rather than sanitizing it. Really well done!
So powerfully wrought, Jason! It doesn't look away from the brokenness of our world and the depravity of humanity, but it doesn't stay there either. Incredible conclusion of hope in something beyond what's material
Great wrap-up, Jason! I'm glad he finally found the light!
As I read this, it sounded as if I was reading from the perspective of a person pulling strength from the past. From an age we've only ever read about in books. The illumination of the modern struggles, addiction and loneliness, brings this poem right home to what is relatable and to what hurts the most. Satan says we can come to him to find our worth, but he makes us feel worthless instead. I caught that, at least I think I did. Not too sure about my interpretation 🙈 The parts near the end was just too beautiful. It's almost like it's written in the voice of our saviour. And what a breath of fresh air that was. To know there's hope and there's someone to protect us ❤️🤗
You have a way with words and poems that just draw you in. Great job!
Beautifully written!
What a great series. Excellent work
Riveting writing! Go Jason! 🫶🏾
That was so heartbreaking but I'm glad it had a good ending. Loved your poem!
Jason, that was beautiful!
I loved the original, and I love the updated version as well.