Borders
Haunted Echoes Challenge
By Pamela WilliamsPublished 3 months ago • Updated 3 months ago • 1 min read
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Fleeing cold borders—
from claws of gripping steel to
claws of gripping steel.
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Pamela Williams
“Suppose I had wings like the dawning day and flew across the ocean. Even then your powerful arm would guide and protect me.”
— Psalm 139:9–10, Contemporary English Version (CEV)
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Comments (7)
I like the originality to double up on the second and third lines, especially in a haiku. The image immediately leads you to contrast fences with monster claws- both of which don't sound good...
Oh, this is very real.
This is true horror, isnt it, the reality in this.
The repetition definitely brought the fright out of me. Now I can never forget this haiku. Then when my mind reminds me. I will be met again, by fear. Outstanding work Pamela. Best of luck in the challenge 🤗❤️
Such a powerful use of brevity. In just a few lines, you capture the inescapable tension of fleeing oppression only to find it mirrored elsewhere.
Yikes, the feeling of entrapment is stark, Pamela.
This was creepy and sad, and it reminded me of Alice in Borderland because of the borders you mentioned. Loved your poem!