Don't involve yourself with anyone.
Love is designed to tear apart.
It cradles you in its core
Where its warmth suffuses,
Softening, shaping
Making you feel -
Until you
Feel it
BITE.
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Ooooh. This is a good entry Rachel! Loved the direction it took and it flows beautifully with the intended punch/bite!
This is sooo impactful and masterfully written. Loved it!
Oooo! This was a dark nonet and I am all here for it!! Great work Rachel!!
Urgh, so true. The picture should have given me a clue, but I was still shocked by the final 'BITE'!
Me likely! Great pic for this poem, especially the final, ferocious bite!
This was an experience! I felt lulled and then stunned!
Ouch, so painful!
Ouch!
Really well done, Rachel!
I love how this poem ends with a bite, both literally and metaphorically. I could feel it!
Loved your Nonet!
And trust me, in the end, it always bites. Loved your Nonet!
Felt that bite at the end and love the Joy Division reference, whether it be accidental or not! :) Well done, Chum!
There are some good advices in the poem.