in the dim w~a~t~e~r,
she learns his currents before they even move—
a creature built to understand what she can’t afford.
she g〜l❈o❈w〜s near him,
a soft lantern in the silt, never rising,
because surfacing would mean losing her breath.
and so she s︳t︳a︳y︳s—
half-myth, half-light, breathing beside
the world without belonging to it.
About the Creator
Komal
I write poems and stories that hit the feels.
When I’m not lost in my own plots, I’m either daydreaming about the next big idea or just winging life with a grin.
𝕀 𝕙𝕒𝕧𝕖 𝕥𝕙𝕖 ℙ𝕠𝕨𝕖𝕣 𝕥𝕠 𝕞𝕒𝕜𝕖 𝕒𝕟 𝕀𝕄ℙ𝔸ℂ𝕋
'20/20'
"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
By Sean Callaghan7 days ago in Beat
Comments (13)
"Surfacing would mean losing her breath"... 🥺 I’ve definitely felt like that half-myth creature before, just watching the world go by. Such a beautiful little poem! ❤️
“Breathing beside the world without belonging to it” hauntingly beautiful, Komal. 🌊✨
Your use of stretched, stylized typography becomes part of the meaning. The elongation mirrors the suspension of breath and time, giving the poem a slow pulse that deepens its atmosphere.
This is soothing and calming
I like the feeling of waiting, anticipation, and then being frozen in place
OOOoooo So dark and slinky. Like slipping on a black dress and drowning in it.👏👏🖤𓆈
The image absolutely kills it. And great lines to go with it amazing @Komal
Your last three lines are captivating! I love seeing her through your eyes
I love your imagery here! I felt like I was drifting along with her.
This is very moving… The tension felt in it is very strong.
“breathing beside the world without belonging to it“ Damn. This line alone can be used to describe so many things and feelings. Love it!
Beautiful rendering of a mysterious and other-worldly existence coming with a cost. Axlotls are intriguing creatures of both worlds, water and air. ❤️
This is so beautiful and thought-provoking! And layered with many emotions :)