As Long As We Both Shall Live
Promised (for Karen)
In the rush of emotion, of course we promise.
What's mine is ours
To have and to hold
Sickness/health.
Until death us do part.
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Because that seems so far away from this moment.
This today of bubbling, fizzing, effervescent joy.
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I refuse to remember the truth-
We are born dying
Clock ticking
Seeking to see and be seen
Hands and souls reaching across time
Stretching, reaching, (hopefully) connecting for the briefest moment.
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We enter alone-
ripped away from all we knew.
We will leave alone-
closing one door and entering, stepping, tumbling, falling
into what ?
We don't know the what; the next.
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We barely know the now; the us.
Our moments splurged as if they are endless-
Stopping in seconds,
liquid golden moments of clarity,
to savor them on our skin-
drinking the blessing like balm to our parched spirits-
lowering sun-dazzled sleepy eyes to our clasped hands.
To-
This YES.
This Us.
This Promise.
This Forever in this moment and in all the rest we are granted.
As long as we both shall live.
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Forever would just be the fraction- the smallest start- of enough.
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Here is the smallest of poems about the largest thing ever.
And here is one of those special golden moments that can light memories
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Judey Kalchik
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Comments (37)
Stunning!
Absolutely amazing work
So many truths are weaved in...
Very beautiful, and well done i did enjoy this.
This is incredibly beautiful, with a touch of melancholy.
Very elegant expression in verse of Matrimony.
Your poem is very powerful, Judey. What a talent you are!!
A simply beautiful, soulful exploration of marriage and love. The music in these verses was so soothing, and now I want lay on a pillow and just savor that sense of calm and love your words evoked in me. 😌
Superb
This is absolutely beautiful. I loved every line.
This is a beautiful and touching poem. The imagery and language used really capture the essence of a lifelong commitment to love and support each other through all the ups and downs. The line "we'll dance through the pain" is especially powerful, as it speaks to the resilience and strength of a true partnership. The repetition of the phrase "as long as we both shall live" throughout the poem serves as a reminder of the depth and significance of this promise. Well done! PS -- Do readmy poetry on "Fading Memories: The Death of Childhood" here - https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/fading-memories-the-death-of-childhood%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Ms. Judey - As most of us, I can so relate to your articles on so many levels - Thank you for that - I'm in no way into self promotion; I'm just a self described 'Goof Writer' for the fun of it. But, I have written a (3) minute story about my Lost - Love Titled: The Last Valentine' - My Pleasure - Jay Kantor, Chatsworth, Cal 'Senior' Vocal Author
Beautiful!
aahh makes me remember someone thank you for sharing
Absolutely beautiful poem. It is so easy to promise forever in a happy moment. The moment of "us" now. Time is the only one that will prove whether the promise will hold true. Great poem.
Beautiful!!😊💕
Pure artistry Judey. A Beautiful poem that captures in words what we can only feel. A portrait that we can now touch. Thank you. Congratulations 🥰
Excellent! So many parts of this poem speak to me! The top story is well deserved.
Beautiful piece, congratulations on Top Story!
This is beautiful and epic. 💖
I should not have read this at work because I just got engaged barely a month ago and this poem just pulled at every string in my heart and now I'm trying not to sob out loud. Gorgeous. Thank you so much for this ❤
Beautiful and Congratulations on your Top Story✨💖🎉
Your poem captures the moment exquisitely. Congratulations on Top Story!!!
Absolutely beautiful and true love inside your sadness! Congratulations 🎈🎊 on top story!
Congrats on the TS