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A Void [of Plums]

After W.C. Williams’ “This is Just to Say”

By Mackenzie DavisPublished 3 years ago 1 min read
A Void [of Plums]
Photo by Nadeykina Evgeniya on Unsplash

A note lay on our dining room table. “The plums in the icebox — forgive me.”

The light was dim through rain clouds and thick kitchen air. I asked myself how

to read it. Forgive me. Was this harried scrawl hitched to some lingering regret? The icebox mocked

my wide eyes. Void of breakfast plums. So cold, and so sweet. My sigh of longing.

-

The chair told me to sit. Cushion dust blurred my sight of the table and I read the note. I sneezed,

then read it again. The closest thing to tasting them, black words on fading page.

I thought of marriage. An empty, mediocre compromise. Suppose love should have fixed it.

Forgive me. I rested my chin on the linoleum and blinked at the phrase.

-

Rain light darkened more and I knew the day had passed me by. I ate an apple

from the fruit bowl. Visions of him danced in my periphery, furtive plum burglar.

I stared at those two words, the letters mismatching the remaining words. I studied the strokes of his pen. A scribble.

A dash. Then forgive me. He had been deliberate.

-

I blocked me out, thumbed it like an accusation.

Eyed the remainder.

   

        

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Thank you for reading! This is part of a series of poetic emulations, where I take a poem I love and either write an answer, a continuation, or something new inspired by it.

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Mackenzie Davis

“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll

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  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarran3 years ago

    Oh this is such a clever idea! Your poem was sophisticated, like the kinda poems I used to study for literature. I loved it!

  • A through-the-looking-glass poem from the perspective of the plumless. Absence as thick as air. I also like the question of "how to read this" which literary critics have long been asking and debating of the original poem. An intriguing emulation!

  • Gigi Gibson3 years ago

    Wow!

  • Judey Kalchik 3 years ago

    This poem drips exhaustion, resignation, and broken crumbling longing. Perfect.

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