~~~
she o p e n her ribs
like curtains
[ black air ]
[ seeping in ]
(—comecloser—)
the night enters barefoot,
d
r
i
p
p
i
n
g
saltwater / ash / breath
(—don’tlookbehindyou—)
h i s s k u l l
fits into her palm
—(too perfectly)—
(—youwerealwaysmine—)
as if these hands
were carved for forgetting
the temperature of s k i n
(—yourskin—)
[ the sockets ]
[ aren’t empty ]
they lead somewhere he won’t follow
(—youwill—)
she pressed her ear
to his teeth
<< h o l l o w >>
whispers:
"you have been dead longer than you think"
(—butnotlongenough—)
her mouth: dirt + candlewax
his grin: rain that falls upward
she want to crawl inside
(through the spine)
(—closetotheheart—)
s i t
where his heart used to be
& pull the strings of bone until
he dance
(—untilyoustop—)
o u t s i d e :
the sky peels like wet wallpaper
(—skin—)
i n s i d e :
her shadow holds hands with his
&
something else
s h e
c a n ’ t
n a m e
(—butitknowsyou—)
About the Creator
Komal
I write poems and stories that hit the feels.
When I’m not lost in my own plots, I’m either daydreaming about the next big idea or just winging life with a grin.
𝕀 𝕙𝕒𝕧𝕖 𝕥𝕙𝕖 ℙ𝕠𝕨𝕖𝕣 𝕥𝕠 𝕞𝕒𝕜𝕖 𝕒𝕟 𝕀𝕄ℙ𝔸ℂ𝕋
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Violence Begets
"Any last words, cowboy?" "None you'd understand, sodbuster." "Funny. That's Marshall Sodbuster to you. But I meant some last nugget that would help us in the adjudication of the myriad offenses counted against you and your gang. I wasn't asking for penitence."
By Adam Diehl4 days ago in Fiction
Comments (21)
It definitely is scary with a big creepy factor. You have talent komal keep it up
Congrats on the Top Story! Well deserved!
Now this was scary! I tip-toed through afraid of the next surprise. Congratulations Komal!
Yay Komal!! Congrats on honourable mention this week!!
Hoooooosah!!! Love your creative expression here Komal! This poem was a journey that I intend to take again. Keep 'em coming and congrats on the top story! 🎉👏🏾🎉
Nice.. congratulation on your top story
Creepy in the best way possible, Komal!! Congrats on Top Story!!
delightfully dark
Congratulations on TS! ✨✨
Oh My Goodness! This is brilliant! I love it!!! Congratulations on your Top Story! Richly deserved!!! You just **know** {I hope} what a big huge fan I am of your formatting! You've inspired me! And this is more of your usual w o n d e r s. Your words are accentuated by your artful way of presenting them. What I especially love here is the TITLE! And subtitle!!! So freaking cool!!!! That's underselling everything else, reducing it to the *BestTitleEver*! This whole masterpiece is so compelling. I can't praise your art highly enough❗⚡
He sounds absolutely diabolical, my friend. And like Caitlin said, you've handled the mystery brilliantly.
I like the mysterious vibe from the get go. The unknown title. Was perfect for this. The letters close together, keeps our eyes focusing. The gothic verses, sickly keeps us guessing. I like that it started off with the dark imagery of her ribs opening like curtains. The dripping word as a list of letters acts so much like a drip in effect. Scary words in brackets. Especially being told not to look behind you. His grin is rain that falls upwards. How disturbing, I am trying now to imagine but I am failing miserable. Damn, 'pull the strings of bone' until he dance 👏🏾 Fantastic gothic surreal poetry Komal. 🤗❤️
Ooo so haunting and intriguing!
This was so chilling and hypnotic. It reminds me of a fever.
felt like a lucid nightmare-nicely done
Masterpiece!!!
Should I feel chills... I felt like it was a nightmare that I was watching yet artaking in at the same time. watching me flay about. I Missed your writings
I was so in MOOD, and the ad killed it 🤣 What series is it? Your poem is Haunting yet beautiful!! 🙌👏
Ahhhh, perfect! It prickles like goosebumps across your body. I love the formatting. 👌
Delightfully macabre and lush with imagery. 🥰🥰🥰
Very dark poetry forsure.