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Discoveries

Do you ever actually know a person?

By Mark GagnonPublished 3 years ago 4 min read
Top Story - May 2023
Discoveries
Photo by Birmingham Museums Trust on Unsplash

“So, this is what I get for trusting you.” The vitriol oozed from Cain’s words. His eyes burned with hate as he glared into her gold-flecked orbs. All he needed to do was pay attention, but that was something he didn’t want to do. It was only now, knowing the end was near, that he saw her for what she actually was—a demon.

Cain’s business consisted of buying and selling artifacts created by artisans from ancient civilizations. Most of his clients were museums and wealthy collectors. At periodic intervals, Cain took part in trade shows and showcased some standard items. For the rare items, he displayed detailed photographs while keeping the actual relics locked securely in a vault. Most revered of all his antiquities was a jewel-encrusted gold necklace created by a Sumerian artisan over three thousand years ago.

They met innocently enough, or so he thought. He was standing behind his display table when she strolled over from another booth. Cain did his best to appear unaffected by her stunning physique, a dazzling smile, and gold-tinted eyes, the rarest of all human eye colorings. She feigned interest in a few of the items on display, then gravitated to the picture of the necklace.

“That’s the centerpiece of my collection. My pride and joy.”

“I’m sure it is. It draws me like a magnet and always has.”

Her voice was soft as a gentle evening breeze, its tone resonating in him like a violin solo. Cain thought her comment about the necklace was odd, but maybe she had seen pictures of it previously. That was a question for another time. Right now, he wanted to know more about her.

“I’ve never seen you at one of these shows before. Are you an antiquities collector?”

“Oh, I’ve gleaned a few items over the years, but never anything as lovely as your necklace. Did you know it was created for a specific woman by the most talented craftsman of his time?”

“It appears you’ve done your homework on this piece. I had no idea it was created for someone in particular. Did you happen to come across the lucky lady’s name?”

“Her name is Lilith, the same as mine.”

“Now that’s an interesting coincidence. You have a name that goes back to the beginning of time. Jewish mythology contains many stories about your namesake, and most of them are quite scary.”

“The same can be said for your name, Cain. I believe we all carry the legacy of the one that first bore our name. Do you have the necklace with you? I would very much like to see it.”

“I’m sorry Lilith, but I never take something that valuable to a show. I would be happy to let you look at it at my gallery after the show finishes today.”

Cain’s subconscious lunged for the words, trying to stop them from exiting his mouth, but to no avail. Somehow, he knew this lady was trouble, but he ignored what his survival sense was telling him and made the offer.

“That’s most generous of you, Cain, and your timing is perfect. I bet you didn’t know that the jewels are arranged in a specific pattern that will capture the energy from the moon and several planets when they are perfectly aligned. The last time the alignment occurred was two thousand years ago. It will happen again tonight. We can see if the legend is true together if you like.”

The show finished shortly after dusk. The cloudless evening sky was darkening into inky blackness, allowing the stars, planets, and moon to regale Earth with their brilliance. As they walked to Cain’s nearby storefront, conversation was unnecessary, and Lilith took Cain’s hand in hers. Cain felt a rush of adrenalin as her warm hand touched his. This was going to be a wonderful or terrifying evening.

Cain unlocked the back door, which opened directly into his office. Before he could turn on the light, Lilith passionately kissed him and whispered that the moon provided enough light.

“May I see the necklace now, Cain?”

“Of course, my dear.” It was impossible to refuse her anything now.

He opened the safe, withdrew the necklace, and presented it to her. What happened next both exhilarated and shocked him. She pulled a single string on her dress, which fell to the floor, revealing her perfect naked body. She placed the necklace around her neck and turned toward the moonbeams streaming in through the open door. The jewels pulsed with glowing energy.

Infused with an additional source of power, she turned to Cain.

“You killed my lover, Able. I’m here to avenge him.” She pointed a finger at him and a bolt of energy arced from it into Cain’s chest. Cain the man fell to the floor, but Cain the Immortal rose and returned an energy bolt of his own. They lifted into the night sky and battled until dawn with neither one gaining an advantage.

The Immortals separated, vowing to meet again one day. Cain also vowed never to ignore his subconscious voice again.

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About the Creator

Mark Gagnon

My life has been spent traveling here and abroad. Now it's time to write.

I have three published books: Mitigating Circumstances, Short Stories for Open Minds, and Short Stories from an Untethered Mind. Unmitigated Greed is do out soon.

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  • Nancy J. Koch6 months ago

    Wow, your writing really pulled me in from the very first line! Your voice is so unique and powerful. Do you happen to have any published works on Amazon? I’d love to explore more of your content.

  • Marie381Uk about a year ago

    Well done on top story

  • Paul Stewartabout a year ago

    Damn, Mark this was great! your deft hand weaving a tale that keeps the reader entranced to the last word is to die for!

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  • Testabout a year ago

    well written

  • Tina D'Angeloabout a year ago

    How did I miss this one? Your descriptions put me to shame, Mark. Elegant, vivid, without being corny. You are such a wonderful writer.

  • noor2 years ago

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  • Dana Crandell3 years ago

    Wonderful imagery and suspense!

  • Test3 years ago

    The way you painted vivid imagery and created a sense of suspense throughout the narrative truly kept me on the edge of my seat. Your attention to detail and the way you developed the characters made them come to life in my imagination. Moreover, I appreciate how you managed to balance the elements of horror with a touch of hope and resilience. It's not easy to create a sense of positivity in a genre often associated with fear, but you skillfully achieved that delicate balance. The underlying message of finding strength in the face of the unknown resonated with me on a profound level. Your writing style is engaging and evocative, making it a pleasure to read from start to finish. I was fully immersed in the story, eagerly turning each page (or scrolling in this case). Your talent for crafting suspenseful moments and building anticipation is truly commendable.

  • Obiageli Nwankwo3 years ago

    Wow, great read

  • Cleonice Souza3 years ago

    Congrats for top story

  • J. S. Wade3 years ago

    Great story ! Love the characters! Nice build up. congratulations 🥇

  • Oooo, I loved that ending! I'm a sucker for horror stories, especially ones that involves revenge. Fantastic job and congratulations on your Top Story!

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  • Test3 years ago

    OMG!!! She’s back!!! Thank you Mark, I needed this!!! This was amazing from start to finish, you set the scene perfectly and although you took your time reintroducing her, I knew who it was from the get-go. Poor Cain, if only he’d known sooner what Lilith is capable of! Knowing this character ahead of time, only built the tension more for me as I waited for what she planned to do with him. I love this new chapter of her story! Lilith id forever destined to battle with the biblical men of the past. Well done Mark and it fits nicely into the Unexpected Uncovering Challenge!

  • JBaz3 years ago

    That was a great addition and take on the challenge. I really liked this. Congratulations

  • Cathy holmes3 years ago

    Great story. Congrats on the TS

  • Ohh 😯 this was a biblical sort of narrative with a twist 👌I enjoyed this

  • Jay Kantor3 years ago

    Hi Mark ~ Coincidence: I've written through my 'Subconscious' ~ "Alter-Ego" ~ by just letting my Fingers do the Keyboard walking; often I'm not certain what they'll say. Fun that way at this stage! Jay Kantor, Chatsworth, California 'Senior' Vocal Author - Vocal Author Community -

  • Very interesting tell and well rendered, enjoyed reading it.

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