Small town fever dream
For the Epic Beginnings challenge
Tank stood over the bodies. There were three, and he knew them all. Were they still people? A difficult question for him to answer, and not the first question he expected his brain to fish out of the questions he had swimming around in his head.
The bodies were mutilated past recognition, but Tank recognised them. He hadn't done the heinous act, but had found the aftermath.
His family, his parents - adopted, not many knew their real parents anymore - and his brother lay motionless, in pieces.
He remembered parking and walking up the drive. Upon entering the house via the front door, he found no one. Without anyone in the kitchen or living room downstairs, he scoured the house from top to bottom and found no one, yet they should all be home.
He didn't know how long he'd been standing there, in front of the opened garage door, but the light was fading so it must have been a while. He made a decision and walked trance-like to the phone hanging on the wall in the hallway.
999.
They arrived in minutes, a small town and the station wasn't far away, Wednesday evenings weren't busy, and this was big news. A triple homicide.
Tank was preparing himself for a vigilante streak, to hunt down and find his family's killer, to get his revenge.
Somehow it was only then that he noticed the blood on his own hands.
And it was at that point that the police officers saw the change in the young man, it was like a switch had been flicked, and the innocent man standing in front of them had been replaced.
Tank understood now that the man he saw in the mirror everyday wasn't just a bad dream, but a living nightmare.
About the Creator
Liam Storm
I currently work as a thatcher, but love the art of writing a narrative, currently I am working on putting my ideas onto paper and creating a book. In the meantime I create short stories to keep myself, fiancée and two dogs entertained.
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
Expert insights and opinions
Arguments were carefully researched and presented
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Masterful proofreading
Zero grammar & spelling mistakes



Comments (20)
This was short but yet captured the deed and the outcome perfectly. Congrats are in order.
Back to say congratulations for the 2nd place win for this amazing story!
Congratulations, I really feel this is a great contender for the challenge
Hey Hey Mr Storm, just taking Vocal by storm today!!! (I think I'm punny 😅) First he sneaks a win with Mr. McEvoys challenge and then gets 2nd on the most discussed story of the week! Not too shabby, congrats! 🥳
Good work, this felt like a lot more story than the word limit would allow!
Great job, very fleshed out for micro fiction
I was very absorbed in this! I became quite sad when I realized it was ending, haha!
Deserves to be a top story!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
This is great storytelling. Congrats on the TS.
This was a very compelling read. I especially liked the ending, but the entire story was extremely well-written. You captured a lot of emotion concisely.
Congratulations. I appreciate it.
Back to say a well earned congratulations
Oh!! Liam this was such a creepy and unexpected twist!! I loved this!! Congrats on Top Story my friend!! 🎉
Great descriptions. Interesting
This is so profound. Fr
Oh wow, does he like have a split personality or multiple personality disorder? Loved your story!
A fairly accurate description of a killer indeed! Great descriptive writing and intriguingly mysterious.
So much in so few words, a great character development. We know so little yet there was a lot of hints. Excellent
Great tension towards the end, Liam to that last line. Nicely done.