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For DK's Keep It One Hundred Challenge
One hundred miles according to my GPS. Fitting. She's been gone a hundred days. I have proof here on my arms. One cut per day. A hundred inch long scars. Each a promise. It's almost midnight. 11:58 p.m. Time for one hundred and one.
Fumbling in the console I pull out my razor knife. 11:59 p.m. Pulling over to the edge of the dark, empty road, I pull out my lighter. Flicking it I gaze for a moment at the flame. Orange, yellow, blue ... I tear my gaze from the little dancer and slice the sharp edge of the razor into her core. The flame parts then recoalesces, enveloping the steel. Heat transfers to the razor's edge as it does to my own molten rage.
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About the Creator
Andrew C McDonald
Andrew McDonald was a 911 dispatcher for 30 yrs with a B.S. in Math (1985). He served as an Army officer 1985 to 1992, honorably exiting a captain.
https://www.amazon.com/Killing-Keys-Andrew-C-McDonald-ebook/dp/B07VM843XL?ref_=ast_author_dp
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Wow! Very intense. A difficult topic to talk about as its often hidden (for reasons I echo commenters below, but still hidden and hard to talk about)
Dharrsheena’s comment thread was helpful to me. Ditto Mark’s comments. Very sad some people may react this way to a breakup.
That is a brutal remedy that cures nothing. Congratulations for your Top Story award!
Is this cutting cathartic or obsessive? Very intense and somehow transformational as she is searching for herself during this act of self-harming... horrifying to think people do it. Congrats for top story!
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Very engaging especially for 100 words. Just need to ask because one line says it’s his arm being cut another says it is hers.
Okay apparently I'm the only one who doesn't get what's happening here 😅😅 Like is he cutting himself? Self-harming? If I'm wrong, please explain it to me 😅 Congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
This was soooo edgy (pun not intended but it happened), I love the moodiness of this Andrew!!
How heart-wrenchingly sad! You’ve managed to capture such a tragic character and construct a vivid scene in just a few words! Huge congratulations on Top Story! Very well deserved!
Your micro fiction packed a lot of emotion into only 100 words. This is so well done. Congratulations on the Top Story, too.
I love this piece. I feel this way at times. I can genuinely say, this is a perfect writing, creating a feeling. I can see myself reading this over and over again. Very unique, dark and beautiful. I love it.
Great piece! Very creative.
Wow, such a heart-wrenching story. Excellent writing tho.