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Mist

A Story Every Day in 2024 August 21st 234/366 and an entry for the Epic Beginnings Challenge

By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago 1 min read
Mist
Photo by Greg Rosenke on Unsplash

There wasn't one day when Mist discovered his preferred form. He'd always been a strange little boy, difficult to grasp both physically and intellectually. He didn't know where his power came from. He had no parents to ask.

He'd tried all forms. His first reading of "Dear Zoo" had been an education to himself very early on, as he turned himself into animals, and he had tried on the shape of other inanimate things like rockets and trucks and airplanes.

Mist was what he liked best.

He was naturally curious and liked to act without restraint. Mist provided him with the means to pervade everywhere and he took full advantage of it. No place was out of reach when you were Mist and there was never any question about your presence.

And in being able to get wherever he wanted, he accumulated knowledge and he could see that what he gathered on his excursions had worth. He was always conscious of the power he held and the ability he had for both good and bad. But he wasn't a hero. Nobody knew what he was.

The information he collected he sold on the internet for a price. Secrets that people had kept hidden could suddenly be exposed but he didn't do commissions. If he knew, he would share it - for the right price.

So, beware moisture on your windscreen, the sheen on the sauna wall. Or the early morning fog that blurs your view of the mountains, that rises off the surface of a lake as a loon swims past. Feel the danger of the moisture on your upper lip, when you are in the throes of passion with a stranger or the cold day when you murder and your breath can be seen.

Mist is always there, watching.

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Rachel Deeming

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  • Joe O’Connorabout a year ago

    Great opening line Rachel. It’s like The Invisible Man! That’s some superpower…

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    Woah! So creepy! What a creative origin story!

  • That felt threatening hahahahhahahaha. Loved your story+

  • John Coxabout a year ago

    Oooh! This is really, really good! A died in the wool, bonafide X-men bad guy, Rachel! Great entry!

  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    This was an awesome piece. He's sort of like a naughty Harry Potter beneath the Cloak of Invisibility.

  • Madison "Maddy" Newtonabout a year ago

    Very interesting piece, well done!

  • Hannah Mooreabout a year ago

    Excellent. The very thing that hides you...

  • Kayleigh Fraser ✨about a year ago

    He had the means to pervade everywhere. I was really loving this word and usage in your line of this story. I don’t know why! I really enjoyed the whole story too… as Rick says, it is very original 💜🙏🏻

  • Rick Henry Christopher about a year ago

    This was really very good and very original. I really enjoyed reading it.

  • D. J. Reddallabout a year ago

    A definite and distinct deftly done is called for in this case. Shifting shapes and points of view is something at which you routinely excel, and you managed to make Mist eerily enigmatic and sympathetic at once herein.

  • Amy Blackabout a year ago

    Clever, ;) nice prose, too. The imagery is vivid, and somehow, you made the mist seem corporeal. Well done.

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