Mine. At Last.
A "Romantic" Tale of dancing and Etta James for the 500 Word Shockwave Challenge
At last, we danced across a dancefloor of broken dreams. At last, we danced, though you played hard to get, so nonchalant to my advances. Lured me in as Etta James did sing.
At last, my love has come along. My lonely days are over and life is like a song, the perfect picture of beauty in my arms. Though you acted as though I were just another wannabe suitor, just another flash-in-the-pan, good for just a dance, chancer. I had watched you for long enough from the shadows, unnoticed.
Sensually your skin barely touched mine, sensorially we were locked in the passion and fascination of the marriage of sonic sublimity and subtle, latent sexual non-verbal communication. At last, our bodies were so close to being as one. But as my hands reached for yours behind your slight and curvaceous body that pressed against the glossy fabric of your dress, you reacted like the queen of nonchalance.
At last, we're as close as we've ever been. Though our eyes never meet, the music and Etta's voice carry us along. There are moments that stand out in our lives as important. Sometimes we don't know just how special they are until they're history. Then there are those times when we know from the moment we step into that situation or onto that dancefloor with the most breath-taking woman we have ever set our eyes on, we know it's special. The skies above are blue.
My heart was wrapped up in clover. The night I looked at you.
As we continued to sway an unforgettable slow waltz and I felt goosebumps over my body as if it were on fire, we still did not fully embrace. You were carried by the music, as I was carried by you.
The sweet nothings I whispered in your ear, I wondered how much you really heard, over the music and the revelry of the other dancers. Not that I paid much attention to the other dancers. My eyes had been focused on you for a long time and at last, you would be mine. As form and function flowed, faded and fell away to nothing, nothing but a dance to my destiny. I found a thrill to rest my cheek to. A thrill that I've never known. For a moment, as my fingers caressed your sides, you paused—your breath catching, giving way to the sensations. Your breathing hitched before you started to sway again. I struggled to maintain my footing and take charge of our dance. Our mating ritual.
Oh, and then the spell was cast.
And here we are in heaven.
For you are mine.
At last.
For you never knew I was there, all that time, all that precious time. Your fate was sealed, the hand already played. I swore I'd use my powers of invisibility sparingly.
Then the spell was cast and here we are in heaven. You never knew, never felt. Yet you are mine. For eternity.
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Paul Stewart
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Comments (16)
Well, I adored the use of At Last, now I've got it stuck in my head! Such a great song! The ending was super creepy! Gave me goosebumps! Fantastic shockwave entry!
A very interesting twist... How you wrapped us up in the trance of a dance, pulling at our heartstrings, to yank us by them in the end. Brilliantly written, Paul! I loved the passion and fascination mention as well. I read this shortly after reading Broken Bonds, and I love how these are tied together a little. Inspiring, as always. [Prize 4/5]
Great entry my friend
After our discussion on your story The Spanish Key, I reread a piece that I had written several years ago about my musician uncle that used Etta’s version of At Last as a framing device. What a fascinating coincidence that you have used the same song for the mystical, magical dance of this story. Another great challenge entry! Good luck!
Creepy!! And exceptionally well written 👏✨
Again, I'm the only one who doesn't get it, despite your Author's Notes. I mean, I get the story but not the twist. He has powers of invisibility? 😅😅
Well, your story certainly isn’t invisible! I’ll remember it eternally! Amazing work, as always! Very creative!
The evanescent gets the girl? Who'da thunk it?!!!
Really like Etta James 'At Last'. This is a story for one not to give up certain things to me. Good job.
Sinisterly sweet? 🙄
Crazy. Love the song you use though.
Creepy, supernatural stalker. Yes, my kind of story
Creepy. And weird.
Paul, this was so poignantly written! I loved the twist at the end, so well done!!
Oh wow, I haven't heard of Etta James for over 10 years... She was an amazing beast! It's such a wonderful thing when speels are cast over us, and then we end up in the arms of the ones who love us... Loved this ballad
Author's Notes: I am not really sure there needs to be an author's notes, but feels incomplete without it. Wanted to do a nice romantic story. Not. Another story, interestingly that focuses around music, though specifically lyrics. That should be in the AN, I owe a debt of gratitude to Etta James and At Last which was written by Mark Gordon and Harry Warren, it appears. There you go!