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A Story Every Day in 2024 Oct 29th 303/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago 2 min read
A Note
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Luke

It's definitely her! How did she find out where I lived? Maybe she was the person who sent the photo, sending it like a warning shot! Fuck!

Okay. I need to think. I can't leave until she goes. But what if she stays there all night? I can't not leave my house! Fuck! And even if she doesn't stay, what if she comes back? I can't move.

This day was always going to come. Do I just confront it and have done?

Bethan

My heart is thumping in my chest as I sit there. Swirls of emotions. I still can't visualise Luke's face. I don't know what to do. I want answers, that much I know. I have to act on this even if it's just to put my mind at rest that he knows nothing that can help.

I just want to know where my daughter is! All these years of not knowing! All of these years of thinking and wondering. A mother's mind is one not limited by imagination when it comes to thinking about the scenarios that you may need to protect your children from. The news is full of stories of predators and hazards, from paedophiles to uncut grapes. Never mind disease. It's a terrifying place, the world, that you hope your child will only face the best of: the kindnesses, the triumphs, the laughter.

And you hope that you're there to share those, lifelong.

I just want to know. Whatever it is. I just want to know.

Luke

I'm spying on her from the window. She's got her head in her hands. I think she's crying. Fuck. This guilt...I hate it. I hate it being here, all the fucking time. And now, it's here on my doorstep.

She's brought her head up now. She's rummaging in her bag. She's getting something out. I don't know what she's doing? She's getting out of the car!

Shit!

Bethan

I can't sit here. I'm going to try the door. Leave a note if he's not in. With my number. I feel...weird, like a stalker. He may not know anything but...I need to find out, now I've been brought here.

I can only try.

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Rachel Deeming

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  • Paul Stewart11 months ago

    so much real tension and angst, love it!

  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    You've captured the angst and anxiousness or fear in these two characters so well. Great writing.

  • Lana V Lynxabout a year ago

    Luke needs to pull his courage and relieve this tension. Great writing, Rachel!

  • Come on Luke! Be brave like Bethan!🫣🙄

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    Oh the tension! My heart is racing a bit at the anticipation of an interaction

  • Will he answer the door? Will he not? Hmmm

  • John Coxabout a year ago

    Yikes squared!!

  • Sid Aaron Hirjiabout a year ago

    Wonder how this ends

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    Answer the door, Luke.... or, Maybe not.

  • Holly Pheniabout a year ago

    I could really feel the character's emotions. As a parent it made me misty-eyed.

  • Komalabout a year ago

    Beautifully done! Rachel :)

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